Congrats Sean!

As others have mentioned, I too thought the makeup looked great. I didn't really see any story or get any sense of the protagonist's motives, but from a purely visual perspective, I thought it looked good and progressed well.

Good job and I'm glad you got something produced.

This is cool.  I have never had anything of mine filmed, so I can only imagine...

I'll give this a watch when I get the time.  

SEAN......wow I love it. Love the ending. I wasn't sure why the guy did what he did but the end was enough for me....good twist. I think they did a great job with it. Some of the background music at the beginning wasn't what I'd have chosen, but man I'd be proud of this. Awesome! Thanks for sharing!

You rock man!

Sean congrats on the script being made ... The movie could have been visually better ... But i think ur story was good... Although i had that gut feeling that he himself will be the 35th corpse...

Nice work Sean.  Very nice work.  I've written and directed 5 shorts and I thought this one was excellent.  

How did the director find you or did he just find this script here after looking for shorts to do?

Anyway, good job!

Best
Glynn

Quoted from LC Finally you got one filmed - you must be thrilled! A nice pro feel to this and the SFX (bullet wounds in particular) look great.

Thank you, Libby. I really am and thought the visuals were pretty damn good, too.

Quoted from Forgive Make-up was spot on - impressed by that, like people have said. Wasn't too sure what happened lighting-wise, but as ever, Yanks appear to do that so much better that Brits. Two things for me: I didn't get the significance of the clock? It's in the script as well as the film. On it being his brother - I really missed that - I kinda figured there was a bit of a gay relationship going on there, until I saw your post that it was the guy's brother. Sorry. Good on for getting something up there though; this is nicely filmed. congrats.

I agree in part about the lighting. I think there can always be more (the Robert Richardson School of Over-Exposed Lighting), but in the case of this, less may be more. Hard to say.

Ah, the script issues. When I wrote it, I did a lot more backstory than actual story. In the case of the clock, David had been in contact with the police (the shooting had taken place several hours earlier) and volunteered to surrender himself at 2PM. As for their relationship, you could look at it either way. It was another thing that was more detailed in the backstory.

Thank you very much, Simon.

Quoted from Breanne Mattson As others have mentioned, I too thought the makeup looked great. I didn't really see any story or get any sense of the protagonist's motives, but from a purely visual perspective, I thought it looked good and progressed well. Good job and I'm glad you got something produced.

The script was designed to not hint at a motive (they're highly overrated), but I thought it moved at a good clip, too, considering how slow the actual script is.

Thank you, Breanne. =)

Quoted from Guest This is cool.  I have never had anything of mine filmed, so I can only imagine...

It's an interesting feeling to really see how someone can interpret something in a different way than you can. It happens in books all the time, but the visual manifestation of it is very different. I can hope that you see a script of yours filmed one day, too. Hopefully you won't be waiting for 4 1/2 years. =)

Quoted from Pale Yellow SEAN......wow I love it. Love the ending. I wasn't sure why the guy did what he did but the end was enough for me....good twist. I think they did a great job with it. Some of the background music at the beginning wasn't what I'd have chosen, but man I'd be proud of this. Awesome! Thanks for sharing!

I think the ending was my favorite part (figures that it was the only moment that wasn't in the script), too. Joshua had me listen to a really good instrumental song but it belonged to an indie musician, so a different song was composed. It was still good, but if I had the option, I'd have taken the first song. Oh, I'm extremely happy about it. Thank you, Dena.

Quoted from razi Sean congrats on the script being made ... The movie could have been visually better ... But i think ur story was good... Although i had that gut feeling that he himself will be the 35th corpse...

Thank you, Razi. In what ways do you think it could have improved? I know of a couple myself, but it's more nitpick things. I'm glad you liked the script, even if the ending was too predictable.

Quoted from GlynnTurner Nice work Sean.  Very nice work.  I've written and directed 5 shorts and I thought this one was excellent.   How did the director find you or did he just find this script here after looking for shorts to do?

Thank you, Glynn, but I wasn't a part of the actual production (filming, set design, etc). The director asked my opinion on a lot of things, but it was all him and his crew. You know how difficult it is to make a short that's of a good quality, then. I've never had the pleasure and I don't believe I'd really be good at it anyway. I'm sure he'd be happy to hear that, though.

Pretty much the latter, I think. If I had to guess, he searched through unproduced shorts and found it quickly because the scripts are sorted alphabetically (the same reason why I think I've been contacted about 12 Seconds so many times. They're both right at the top).

Congrats Sean,

Really liked it, but didn’t understand the connection between the victim and the shooter – he puts the photo in his hand so there has to be meaning, right?

I did like the music – in a non-dialogue piece, it’s important, and I really liked what they did with it.

A powerful short nonetheless – congrats again, man.

My comment about visuals had nothing to do with your writing ... It was about the way it was made ...

This was impressive looking. The lead looked like he hadn't slept in about a week - which added to his creepy, detached look he had.

As the lack of a "reason" for the actions by the main character... We've all asked that when one of these happens and too many times there's not a real answer or no reason at all (just Google Brenda Ann Spencer's name).

I thought it was effective and even profound without the whole story.

Well, the director has sent me an E-mail that he'd like me to share with you guys, so here goes. He uploaded the script to a short film competition. From the looks of it, it's not a competition that's being judged so much as it's one that's a popularity contest. As a result, to win, it needs votes. So, he asked me to ask you guys if any of you would be willing to vote for it. You have to sign up on the site, but there's several ways (I signed up with E-mail myself) so whatever's easiest for you. This is where you go to sign up:

Clowdy

So, once you sign up, you have to follow six people or projects before it'll let you move on (it took me about five minutes to figure that out). Then, from there, you can vote here:

Leaderboard

If you want to pick "35", feel free, but you don't have to feel obligated. I'm doing this because he asked me to. Anyway, once you click on the little down arrow next to the script, it'll say "Vote". Then, it takes you to the script page. Once you're there, there's a little Heart and a little square thing with two arrows. If you click each of those, it'll give the script 6 points towards votes, which seems to be how the voting is done. Anyway, this isn't something that has to be done today (or used ever again, really, unless you're a filmmaker in England, which is who it's meant for) because there's about a month and a half before voting closes.

But, if you do this, he would appreciate it a lot. If you don't, at least you took the time to read this, so thank you either way.

(I'm also going to be posting this on Facebook, so don't be surprised if you see the exact same message twice.)