A fun little horror short. I always like the criminal on the run story, and it usually fits well in the horror genre. I was worried this was going to be heavily influenced by the film Scarecrows (criminals how just pulled a heist only to get knocked off by killer scarecrows) but your twist was quite unique!

The only problem for me is, dressed in an oversized scarecrow costume, I would think it's almost impossible to take out all those troopers. And then play a joke on someone. Make that a bit more believable though and the problem's solved.

Great job!

Writer,

Thought you set the initial scene up well with some sparse, descriptive writing! After that it kinda got lost. Didn’t think the two convicts dialogue was believable - too much joking around and sarcasm for two men in the run. The phobia would have been more believable had it been about fish rather than a scarecrow, and OH all those troopers about! Anyway, wasn’t bad despite all that. I think you might have something here but it needs a serious rewrite. Good job.

Steve