Good job Greg.  Was this for something or just...for lack of a better term: "For fun"?

My only comment is get rid of the two in twenty two.  It kind of throws off the rythem, too many syllables.

That's beautiful Greg!

I stink at it, but one of my girls can REALLY write.

She's amazing! Our whole fridge door is full of her writings.

Pia

You did a great job with this, Greg! I stink at stuff like this but this was really well done.

-Chris

I wish I was able to write poetry like this. I always try and find words that rhyme with each other instead of just writing whatever that comes from my heart.

There is just one thing that I thought sounded a little weird or odd or whatever and it was the:

"You can have it all
My twenty-two dollars and a basketball."

It just seemed a little out of place, but that is just me. I liked this and I liked the ending.

Sean

Very beautiful, Greg. Love it  

Wow!  Thanks everyone.

Poetry isn't hard if you know what kind of imagery to use.  I find that when you're upset, writing an artful poem is a good way to kind of make yourself better.

Anyway, thanks again

I am still right here
Reading Cobb Hill Massacres
It's, like, a thousand pages long
I need to go shave
Maybe get some food
But I'm stuck here reading
God, why couldn't he trim it down a little??


[Edit:  OK, so this is, like, a time-traveling poem from the future haha]

Ooooh Bert.  You just wait until Starbuck comes out.  I'm gonna be all over that like a piece of cheese!

Greg, that’s very sweet. You are such a sweet guy.

Sweet compliment from a sweet gal.

Thanks