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A treatment is a synopsis of your movie. It explains the story, including the ending. It should also reflect the theme. A decision maker will enjoy this handy document.
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If you have a story that you actually intend to shop around, I think you should prepare a treatment.
What if somebody asks for one and you ain't got it? You can't -- CAN NOT -- whip up a decent one of these in a couple of hours. You can make a bad one, but not a good one.
Better to have it and not need it than...well, you know.
An one hundred and twenty page script generally is pitched to a studio along with the help of a six page treatment. The treatment gives the reader a general feel for the pacing of the story; more importantly, it tells the entire story of the script, in a readable, understandable, and entertaining fashon. If a good treatment is submitted to a studio, they may ask to read the script. Let's use this thread to post treatments of our various projects, critique eachother's treatments/projects, and to help share the stories of our scripts through treatments, and to help develop eachother's treatment-writing/summarising skills.
If your treatment is being written to sell a script to a studio, you must include every turning point and twist. In fact, you must blatantly make apparent to the reader (preferably someone with power in a studio) why point A leads to point B, and why point B leads to C, and so on, to Z. You gotta tell the entire story of the script, in readable prose. Basically, a treatment should include the most important events from most scenes.
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If you have a finished script the treatment is EASY.
Anyone who intends to sell a script should learn how to write a treatment. I try to keep mine under 20 pages.
Treatments are generally written AFTER you write the script, as a selling tool, not as a pre-draft summary. A lot of people use the word treatment to describe their pre-draft summaries, and although that goes against the definition, feel free to go against anything if it helps you write better scripts!
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If you're writing a treatment to plot out your story, you can put in choice lines of dialogue if it's important. [A treatment] wouldn't require dialogue unless it's some kind of revelation that's important to your story.
Your treatment should be a scene by scene description of your script. If good dialogue pops into your head as you're writing, you may as well include it.
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They are really good for helping you and whether or not anyone ever sees it they will see the screenplay in which it came from.
You've never written a treatment in your life? Well, now's your chance to learn how! Start by reading treatments in the TREATMENTS section of SimplyScripts!
I'm having trouble writing a treatment for one of my scripts. The problem is that I want to write a 4 page treatment/ I get to verbose. Also are 4 page treatments double spaced? And are dates put beneath the authors name on a treatment?
1. To make your treatment less verbose, first you should learn to use smaller, tighter sentences. Consider this sentence from your post:
"I've written a script adapted from a short story I wrote that had gotten published."
That sentence is good, however you might want to replace the sentence with a re-arranged version such as:
"I've adapted my published short story into a script."
Shorter is better, where sentences are concerned, because it fits more ideas into a smaller space. In other words: Shorter sentences contain more ideas, in less space.
So how can I make my sentences shorter?
So how do I shorten my sentences?
How'd ya shorten that sentence?
How are sentences shortened?
How I make sentence short, y'all?
Me wanty short sentence, okay?
Look for the important parts of your sentence, and for the parts of your sentence which seem to make the sentence move foreward, and arrange your sentences accordingly.
In other words...
Arrange your sentences according to their foreward- moving, and important, elements.
A foreward-moving sentence element is a part of your sentence that somehow keeps you in suspense until the end of the sentence, if not beyond the end of the sentence.
In other words...
The suspenseful, foreward-moving elements of a sentence, keep you in suspense until or beyond its final word.
So how do you properly arrange your sentences? It varies depending on the purpose for which the sentence is written. Usually, you'll find the important parts of a sentence by looking it over once or twice. I hope this helps you lessen the verbiage of your treatment; if not, try a combination of sentence-tightening and the following method of summarization:
Every scene in your script contains an important element of plot. Identify that important element for each scene in a one sentence summary of each scene; thusly, write one sentence per scene until your script is summarised, and revise that summary artistically until it's got only the flaws of a diamond!
It's good to include dates somewhere on your treatment document. Remember that format is in the eye of the beholder; meaning, there's no set format for treatments. Simply make it appear professional, to the best of your abilities, and people will think it was professionally formatted!
Quoted from Alan_Holman, posted January 7th, 2004, 2:46am at here
Pre-draft summaries are important, though, and a lot of people use the word treatment to describe their pre-draft summaries, and there's nothing wrong with that.
When I'm planning each episode for my website (An Alternative Angel), first I type up a 6-10 line summary of each episode for the season (22 episodes)...so all the key events in each episode that lead up to the season finale. Once I've done that, then I take each episode and type up a scene-by-scene summary with some key dialogue (which can be anything up to about 10 pages long). Once I'm happy with that, I type up the script, then do final editing. Each episode ends up being somewhere between 45-60 pages (depending on whether or not there are fight scenes, or lots of short sentence dialogue). I've not written a treatment before but for me, the scene-by-scene summary that I mentioned is about the closest thing to one.
Everyone has their own style of writing and everyone prepares to write in a different way. You've just got to do what you feel comfortable with.
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Paris: You may have a human soul, Angel, but Angelus is still in you. (An Alternative Angel, ep 2.09, "The Amulet")
A treatment is still a good exercise because it can re-enforce the details of your story's structure within your own mind, and perhaps give you new perspectives on certain events.
I started writing a kinda treatment for my new script which has no name or even a thought of a name because they all sounded to stupid, eventhough it is a hero script about a normal guy who gets a superpower it will be a serious action adventure drama
Anyways if you write a treatment and add in dialogue and or partial scenes is that good or bad? I kinda found myself as I was writing it, writing some dialogue and some partial scenes. I normally wouldn't try something like this but as of late I noticed I cannot write a full length script very well
I already ate up 2 pages on the first act alone and am not even done that yet but I was just looking for some guidance in the way of a treatment
It may be elsewhere on just how to do it but I find people and not articles to be more helpful
If you use "treatments" as a personal tool for the development of your own scripts, they can be as free-form as you wish. Open your mind to infinite possibilities.
It's only when you use "treatments" for selling the script when you must look like you're conforming to a style.
I don't know if you'll find help. It depends on so many things.
So in case, not write really long lines, but extract the best parts ... it's called ...
VERBAL ECONOMY.
If you want more awesomeness in less space, erase redundancies -- or otherwise useless stuff -- from your text!
{IN OTHER WORDS: To shorten stories, erase useless text!}
Here's how!
EXAMPLE 1 The following paragraphs relay the same information.
1. Now I'll show you how to shorten a paragraph into a much shorter thing, such as a sentence or two. Shortening paragraphs in such a way serves to tighten your stories, and make the information seem like it was arranged with more thought. 2. A shorter, tighter paragraph, is a thoughtful arrangement of information. 3. Information is best arranged in short, tight paragraphs. 4. Short, tight paragraphs, are best. 5. The best paragraphs are short. 6. Shorter is better.
EXAMPLE 2 The following paragraphs relay the same information.
1. If you mean to change your meaning, feel free to delete more than what is redundant! 2. Deleting non-redundant words might change the meaning of the paragraph! 3. Deleting non-redundancies might change the meaning of the paragraph! 4. Non-redundancies provide the paragraph with meaning; don't delete them. 5. Don't delete the meaning of the paragraph. 6. The meaning is not expendable. 7. Redundancies are expendable. You'll notice that as you delete words, you'll be compelled to alter other words, in order to make the new composition have the same meaning. {IN OTHER WORDS: As you delete words, you'll alter other words, in order to retain the same meaning.} {IN OTHER WORDS: Delete some words, and alter others, but never lose your point.} {IN OTHER WORDS: Skillfully applied deletions and alterations will retain important information.} {IN OTHER WORDS: Drastic edits can retain important information.} {IN OTHER WORDS: Delete non-information.}
Now put all your shorter, tighter work, into one composition... "Non-information is redundant; delete it, because shorter is bet ... you get the picture!
Do you?
If not, remember semi-colons and double-dashes.
~~SEMI-COLONS~~
EXAMPLE "Non-information is redundant; delete it, because shorter is better." IS SHORTER THAN ... Delete redundant, non-information, because shorter is better. NO, IT'S NOT! I used a bad example! -- or did I? Mwah hah hahaha
~~DOUBLE-DASHES~~
If you write a very long sentence, or a lot of sentences, and if the information in them can all be combined by taking out sentence fragments from the sentence, or from the bunch of sentences, and putting those sentence fragments into a shorter sentence, through the use of double-dashes, the shorter one will relay the same amount of information, but it'll be less redundant, and it'll take up less space.
FOR EXAMPLE ... "If sentence fragments from a very long sentence you wrote contain information which contributes to the ..." GAH! That was another bad example! Or was it, mwah hah hahahah
I'll try again ...
If you write a paragraph, and if that paragraph contains a lot of sentences, you can combine fragments from sentences which have the same subject. Like, for example, this sentence has the same subject as the previous one; namely, sentences. IS LONGER THAN ...
The subject of this sentence -- sentences -- contributes to the entire sentence.
That example was corny. But you get the picture ... or do you? mwah hahahahahaha hahah ahah ahaha
Thanks for the thought but you see as you might think it's a lot of extra words (I don't care how long the treatment itself is.) The problem is that the first act will be too long and no amount of changing words in the treatment will change that fact. I have too many scenes and not enough time if you know what I mean.
You've never written a treatment in your life? Well, now's your chance to learn how! Start by reading treatments in the TREATMENTS section of SimplyScripts!
I know this thread hasn't been updated in a while, but I'm wondering if there is still a "Treatment" section that I can check out. The link above doesn't work anymore. Thanks in advance.