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Hey fellow SimplyScripters, I'm currently looking to shop my new screenplay, The Last Days of the Desert Dogs around to agencies and production companies.
I'd like critique on how I can make this letter as effective as possible. I'm not the best with these things and it's funny that for me, the most daunting aspect of writing is indeed the query. Any help would mean alot.
Here's the revised version:
Dear ....;
I would like to submit my screenplay to you for your consideration.
THE LAST DAYS OF THE DESERT DOGS is an action thriller and modern day western accented with a dark comedic edge. After waking up in the middle of nowhere, Leon remembers nothing from his past. This becomes a problem when it turns out he's double-crossed the most dangerous man alive and he can't remember why. Soon he embarks on a perilous cross-country journey to retrace his steps and reveal the sinister truth about his past.
Please let me know if you'd like to read the script.
I'd probably have to say to refer to them by name right off the bat. 'Dear ...;' sounds a little smug.
:-)
It's been years since I've sent one out, but if you have any publishing credits AT ALL I think it'd be a good idea to throw them in there.
I also wouldn't advise using 'darkly funny'. I heard people hate adverbs as it is and making a word that hardly ever gets branded as an adverb anyway sounds extremely awkward.
Oh crap, extremely's an adverb, ain't it? Man, I hate this writing shit. Dammit! 'hardly's an adverb too!
THE LAST DAYS OF THE DESERT DOGS is a fast paced modern western with a dark comedic edge. A young man wakes up in the middle of nowhere, his memory lost, and discovers he has double-crossed the most dangerous man alive, and must retrace his steps to learn the sinister truth of his past.
First, who are you sending this to - producers or talent?
Producers and agents care about four things: what's your budget, is it fully or partially funded, who's attached, and what's the coverage like. You're not going to interest anyone with the storyline.
My query mentions a bit about the background of the script (its setting), what it's "like" (i.e., an East Coast "Fast Times" meets a comedic "Mean Streets" with an "American Graffiti" feel), then goes on to mention our production team, our budget, who's interested on the financing end, who's attached, who's currently reading, and then gives 4 coverage quotes. Oh yes, and I give the logline only - no synopsis. And I've reeled in a few pretty big reads with this formula.
Personally, I'd make it a lot less formal and try to add some flavor to it. Agents/producers get so many of these things on a daily basis (most are deleted on sight before opening), you really need to grab them with something. For my last script I tried to think out of the box (everything I had done before was pretty formal/standard) and it ended up getting me a read with one of the biggest agencies in LA. I mean, don't go crazy, because it's possible to go overboard...but just give it some thought.
Oh, and your subject line is just as important as the e-mail itself. What I did last time was sent out trial subject lines (about 5-10 e-mails per subject line) and saw which ones hit.