Try the link at the top of this thread. Alternatively, you can try this link:

http://www.freewebs.com/mtlancas/TheUniverseExplained.pdf

Very creative. Very original. I too, as an earlier poster noted, got a little Kubrick sense from it. It was very good, very much about the feel of it, not the think, as Kubrick would say.

Very good pacing. A great deal of action takes place over a relatively short number of pages without feeling rushed. At first, I thought perhaps there might be too much dialogue for the setup but there wasn’t really anything unnecessary and it quickly moved along.

The only possible suggestion I could make is that maybe Quinn could have made a little more effort to try and communicate with people he encountered. He was a professor whose apparent field would have required some language study, yet he only asked anyone if they spoke English and basically dropped it at that.

I know if I were in his situation, I would make a serious effort to try and learn how to communicate more. Anyway, it’s an idea and in fact, may only make it worse. Sometimes less is more and it’s certainly excellent as it is.

Quoted from Martin Well... I didn't make the top 5. Bah! Oh well, it was fun all the same. Thanks for the support everyone.

Martin, this is still a winner all the way in my books hon!!

I look forward to seeing more of your work up on the site.

Love, Andy xxx

Thanks Andy, and thank you Breanne. I see your point about the dialogue at the beginning. I was worried it was too long but I wanted to get enough information across so that what followed made some kind of sense. As for the professor making more of an effort to communicate; I actually wanted to show much more of his adventures in dreamland but the deadline was creeping up and I had to draw the line somewhere. Maybe some day I'll rewrite this and expand on it, in which case that's something to think about. Anyway, thanks for reading. I plan to check out your 150 page sci-fi epic just as soon as I'm done with Andy's Goonies script.

Hey, I’m developing a trust for you as a writer. So far as I’ve seen, you’re really talented.

I hope you don’t feel obligated to read anything I wrote. That “exchange reading” stuff is okay but I personally feel people are drawn to whatever they’re drawn to. I hope no one ever reads my stuff for feeling obligated. Then it would become a chore. I don’t want that.

Your script was a pleasure to read. That’s all I could ask for.

Wow, the ending was so "oh, snap," just yeah.  I was kind of mad at first because  I thought you were gonna pull an "oh, it was all just a dream!"  but then I remembered the "fearful of what humans could achieve with such knowledge...." and thats when I decided, that instead of the ending being blah, that it was oh snap.

I'm sure that when I read this tommorow I will decide never to write comments and stuff after, like , whatever time it is.

Hey Martin.  With the lack of scripts around I have been doing some digging, and I'm glad I have.  I already found two other really good scripts from regular members, and now this one.

DUDE, this was amazing, how in the blue fuck could you write this in only 24 hrs, I hope this bump gets this script read because I truly believe everyone should read this.

Where do I begin.  Well I have to be honest, I am not the smartest person, so I had to read it twice(I have no idea who M.C Escher is ), but at second glance I was able to see what you were trying to do here.

The way you described things here, and the story itself is amazing, this would make a great short film, there are some really neat and cool idea's here.

Great job Martin.

Thanks for the bump, flyboy. Looks like I missed a review from higgs too, so thanks for that, too.

This is one of my favourites. Shame it's almost unfilmable. I had an animator interested a while back but he said he'd need a whole team of animators to pull it off.

Quoted from The boy who could fly DUDE, this was amazing, how in the blue fuck could you write this in only 24 hrs?

Coffee... lots of coffee.

Quoted from The boy who could fly I have no idea who M.C Escher is

Escher was a graphic artist from Holland. You probably recognize some of his work. I was lucky enough to visit the Escher museum in The Hague last year. I often get bored in museums but Escher's work is just incredible. I'll probably be going back there in January.



Anyhoo, thanks for reading. The story is a tad confusing. Someone elsewhere suggested a great idea for an alternate ending so I might just go back to this someday.