One of my all-time favorite shorts.  Forgot all about it.   Glad to see you're still at it.  You need to do something with this script.   Shop it around to Literary Agents and competitions.   There's a great story here.  Tugs the heartstrings.

You might wanna turn this into a full-length feature rom/com.

Abel,

Congrats on finishing a new draft of your script.
It's always interesting for me to revisit material after some new experiences.
Your writing style is here pretty solid, no real hiccups there.
You do have a lot of scene breaks, sometimes 5+ per a page.
I don't know if it affects others, but I couldn't get a good reading rhythm going.

Your script feels very plot driven to me, there's not a lot of organic discovery happening.
That's ok, but coupled with the heavy scene breaks, made this a slow read for me.
This isn't my cup of tea, but your writing style is pretty good.
There's one major character flaw in Neil that needs to be rectified.

**SPOILERS**

After Chasey's death, Neil could care less about the kitten's disposal.
Then at the end, Neil is consoling the mother cat and saying he misses Chasey too?
Unless Neil is bi-polar, this has to change, in my opinion.
Thanks for posting your work and good luck with your writing.

Regards,
E.D.

Hello, Electric Dreamer. Thank you for reading my script and I'm sorry you didn't enjoy it as much as I hoped.

In regards to your major criticism, Neil is initially ambivalent over Chasey's death because he sees her as "just a cat" and not as a living being in her own right. It is only when Alan has him bury Chasey at the creek -- a site strongly associated with their late grandfather -- does Neil realize they are mourning the death of an innocent being. Neil's last line at the end of this scene was meant to indicate this change in outlook.

Thanks once again for your response, Electric Dreamer, and I appreciate your criticisms.