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A shocker to be sure. The ending is so extreme I'm sure no one saw it coming. The writing was clean and the mood was clear. I am always a fan of scripts with bare minimalistic dialogue v.s. long paragraphs of dialogue because films with sparse language delivered well always resonates with more power. Yes the ending is far out but that was what I felt you were going for. You wanted to create something that would make waves and you did that in spades. This short will have a polarizing effect on readers who want to argue realism v.s. fantasy but it is a work of fiction so there are liberties to be taken. Good writing. Can't wait to read more.
Again, thank you all for reading this. I'm actually very pleased with the feedback you all are giving me; thoughtful, honest, and definitely insightful. If any of you have anything you want me to look at, let me know through email or pm, or even just email me the script.
To quickly clarify, when I mentioned toying with the idea of turning this into a feature, I only mean that I'm exploring the possibility. I think many of you have brought up some legitimate concerns. As far as the feature would go, however, the doctor would be older and he wouldn't distribute pictures after the procedure. My idea is that he runs everything above board before, during and after the procedure with one drastic exception: at some point during the procedure he does some sort of mutilation that prevents that woman from getting pregnant. Whatever he does is very subtle and unnoticed by the other staff members in the room. I want this guy to be the sum of evil. This couldn't be portrayed in a short, so I went with the picture idea. If I do develop this into a feature, my approach would be an angle more like SILENCE OF THE LAMBS, and trying to get into the head of this sick bastard.
So we'll see if the idea fleshes out or not. Thanks again everyone for looking at this.