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The Interrogation by Jerome Gilden - Short, Drama - A captivating interrogation between two parties -- a veteran FBI Special Agent and mysterious stranger. 8 pages - pdf, format
Hi Jerome, Im just learning myself so ignore anything I say that makes no sense....
I liked this, easy to read, left us guessing for a while, believable dialogue.
The part where they say they know a lot about him could be fleshed out. Just my opinion...Maybe giving an example of one thing he has been up too, we dont really know why they have him there in the first place. I like the mystery of him it plays well, but just a hint of why they bought him in before tbe change would tie up a lose end...
Twist is cool, didnt see it coming.... something so small as an interrogation turns into a world issue.
Nice work
"Turn that off, our friend has just been killed in a fatal sunlight accident!"....
Without some reference info this one could be anything--from dream to hallucination. Like Anthony, I don't believe a special agent in his 50s or a general in his 60s. They don't work that long.
For me, the setup doesn't work. Why would this superior being, this creature from off planet, be in an ordinary interrogation room? If they came back to retrieve their stuff, why don't they just do it? And why do they need to do something to the special agent? For me, there are just too many questions.
Jerome, my first question is "who is Cameron?" An extraterrestrial or a criminal...why is he involved with a Special Agent...military SA? What are they try to accomplish? To be fair, I'm not a fan of this genre...I prefer real story, of real human beings. But this is me. I would work on the style (slug line night/day) Remember that to "day and night" are attached huge expenses for lighting, scenes, etc. The director has to know the time of the day. Dialogue is good. Polish the script. Best of luck. Fausto
@AnthonyCawood -- Thanks so much for the feedback. I'll definitely take all of that onboard for the next revision
@Kirsten -- Thanks
@#GaryManson -- Thanks Gary. Appreciate it!
@RichardR -- Thanks for the feedback, I'll take that onboard. My intention was to make the scene both vague and 'off' to set the scene the for the eventual revelation that this was all in his mind. But I definitely agree there are a still a lot of questions that are raised at the end of it. I'll address those in my next run-through.
@Fausto -- Thanks for that Fausto. Yeah, I'm still very "fresh" when it comes to shorts. I've spent most of my time working on TV pilot scripts and this was something I wrote early on before I had a true understanding of the genre. I'll take your suggestions onboard.
Thanks again to everyone for your feedback and time
Jerome: The writing is promising but there was a huge logic hole for me that starts here:
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The door opens -- it’s Dr Hanlin and Commander Jins. COMMANDER JINS Did he tell you what you needed to know? SPECIAL AGENT GRYNN Yes--
Aside from the fact that it doesn't make sense that Grynn would say yes - what the heck happened to Hanlin and Jins in the scene. They are in the room when Cameron becomes Grynn, throws him aside, declares his mission etc. and we never hear from them again? They say nothing - they don't try to stop Cameron - it lost me.