Same Name by Steven Burton - Short, Drama, Fantasy - An African American straight actor and a Caucasian gay actor-writer with the same name meet to collaborate on a film project that produces more greatness for both. 13 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Hey Steven,

First thing I noticed, the format is off. There are free programs out there to clear this up for you.

This story didn't really work for me, and honestly, it was quite confusing in spots. Your two main characters having the same name made this a very clumsy read in certain areas. I found myself having to reread the same sections of your script over and over again, I had to power through it. Also, you tend to 'tell' your story as opposed to 'showing' it as screenwriting demands.

I think you have something to say with this script, but it needs a little bit of work before it's made clear.

Good luck.