Hello,
I liked the start and middle. Didn't really feel for her suddenly swoop out a gun and threaten him - that was a bit random for me, although expected. I think you could build to it better - maybe have her more in the script, she's not a driving force there and then suddenly she is so proactive. The ending with the cat is brilliant. SimplyScripts references are always a plus!!
Overall it's very entertaining. I couldn't wait to see what will happen to him and his funny addiction. |