Magic by Jonathan (Prospero) - Drama - Warren is a street magician but struggling to make a living. But when a new nightclub opens it's only a matter of time before he gets a job there. It all goes well until he meets the owner's daughter and from that moment Warren will never be the same… 76 pages - doc, format

Quote from Warren:

“ I’ve told you what it’s about. Magic isn’t just a way of making money or impressing a few people on the street. It’s about something you carry with you, something that’s inside, something that you’re born to do. I can’t even begin to describe the feeling I get when I hear them applaud. Magic isn’t just a few tricks you perform. It’s everything it does to you. Magic exists, CHARLIE. I know it. “
                                             WARREN
CHARLIE, I’m not good enough for a nightclub.

                                              CHARLIE
So get good. WARREN, you’ve been trying to tell me how important your magic is to you. Here’s your opportunity to prove it.



So, If Warren is such a believer in the craft of magic, then how come he’s not a good magician? And he’s been doing it for 16 years??

INT – WARREN’S BEDROOM – DAY
NOTE: THIS SCENE IS SEEN AS A MONTAGE LEADING UP TO THE FOLLOWING NIGHT. WE SEE WARREN REHEARSING HIS PERFORMANCE.

What is that suppose to mean? Why don’t you show us what he’s doing exactly?


INT – STAGE – NIGHT
Once WARREN is on stage, he becomes a totally different person. He seems full of confidence and charisma.
NOTE: THIS SCENE IS ANOTHER MONTAGE OF WARREN’S PERFORMANCE. BUT WE…

We what? Dude if this is about magic then please show us some. Do some research on magic tricks and show them to us. It’s not easy I know, but hey, that’s the beauty of it.


                                         END OF ACT ONE

                                             ACT TWO

Oh, is this a play??

Not sure if you use a writing software, but your formatting seems a bit off.

Too many CUT Tos and FADT TOs, I'm sure you can do without.

How old is Warren, Sarah and Charlie? How do they look like?

Number your pages, it would make life easier to comment on certain scenes.


Quote:  

SARAH turns and walks out, closing the door behind her. WARREN is left alone. After a moment, he gets up and goes over to the door. He turns the knob and opens the door, walks through it and closes it behind him. Pan down to the knob. It’s twinkling with a strange yellow glow.

Strange yellow light glow, and after that Warren develops magical powers... How?

INT – WARREN’S FLAT – DAY
NOTE: WARREN IS SEEN EXPERIMENTING WITH VARIOUS TYPES OF FURNITURE. HE MAKES ITEMS FLOAT AND FLY ACROSS THE ROOM. WE ALSO SEE THE ECSTATIC EXPRESSION ON HIS FACE.


Hey this could be a nice story but you need to establish alot of things to make it believable, and more enjoyable...

Good luck.