Mortal Kombat part 2 by Adam Norman - Short, Action - After the defeat of the demon sorceror Shang Tsung at the supernatural tournament called Mortal Kombat, the new champion Liu Kang returns back to Earth with his new-found friends, only to find that the 10th tournament continues. 5 pages - rtf, format )

I normally don't read fanfic but I thought, "How can you go wrong with a five page sequel to a feature length movie?"

I don't know what you were trying to do here, with this script.  At first, maybe I thought, you wrote a fanfic sequel trailer or something.  Unfortunately, the script is....I don't know what it is.

You have lines in it that make no sense.

Quoted Text We once again stepped into the world of Mortal Kombat

Quoted Text Rayden starts to lose his unique abilities that makes him the one and only God of Thunder and Lightning, and the Protector of the realm of Earth.

You shouldn't include descriptions and lines that require the reader to have knowledge of the first movie. If the reader  didn't read it, then you might as well as written you script in a foreign language.

Quoted Text RAYDEN VS. THE EMPEROR. -- NO DESCRIPTION

I don't know what this means.  And I saw the first movie.  You need a description for everything. Even if the description is something like complete darkness.

I strongly recomend that you read some scripts, here, to learn formating and story telling.  And don'yt pick scripts that sound like they have a lot of fighting.  Pick dramatic shorts where people actually talk like peoiple.

Hope this helps.


Phil