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Don
Posted: August 30th, 2016, 5:06pm Report to Moderator
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Obeast by Rod Thompson and Tim Westland - Horror - A pitch perfect homage to those 80's Horror flicks you loved as a teenager.  After a terrible accident causes a morbidly obese girl's fat to explode from her body, the town residents who tormented her for being fat must face their fate when the disembodied fat takes on a life of its own and begins to exact a horrific yet hilarious revenge. 91 pages - pdf, format


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Well, I loved the 80s but that logline needs some trimming (like most of the 80s hairdos).  Remember it's the first thing we see, so make sure it is tidy and to the point.  If you need suggestions, feel free to ask.


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Thanks, Jeremiah. The first half of the 'logline' was not part of the logline, of course. It's for this crowd to entice them to read. I figured I have a little more leeway here. If I was wrong with that, my apologies.

Here it is, without the preamble.

After a terrible accident causes a morbidly obese girl's fat to explode from her body, the town residents who tormented her will face their own fate when the disembodied fat takes on a life of its own to exact a horrific yet hilarious revenge.

UPDATE: OBeast made Screencraft Horror Semi-finals yesterday! Finger's crossed that it goes the distance!
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JasonH
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I just finished reading it all. I loved it. I thought it was creative. Funny dialogue. Gross, but hilarious deaths. Great lead characters. It felt like Carrie 1976 meets The Blob 1988. I'd really like to see this become a real movie.
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Quoted from TimWestland
Thanks, Jeremiah. The first half of the 'logline' was not part of the logline, of course. It's for this crowd to entice them to read. I figured I have a little more leeway here. If I was wrong with that, my apologies.

Here it is, without the preamble.

After a terrible accident causes a morbidly obese girl's fat to explode from her body, the town residents who tormented her will face their own fate when the disembodied fat takes on a life of its own to exact a horrific yet hilarious revenge.

UPDATE: OBeast made Screencraft Horror Semi-finals yesterday! Finger's crossed that it goes the distance!


Well congrats on the contest and good luck advancing!  I'll crack this open this weekend.  Still think the logline should be trimmed but will wait until after I read the script.


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I Got The Shaft
No Clowning Around
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Father, Forgive Me
Sheriff of Nowhere
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Hi Jason,

Thank you so much for the read and I'm super glad you enjoyed it.

Your description, the Blob meets Carrie, is exactly how we describe it, too!

My favorite death is the one with the Camaro. Talk about a movie moment, eh? Hahaha

Let me know if you need a read!

Tim
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Hey Jeremiah,

Thanks in advance for the read. I hope you enjoy it.

And as for loglines... all suggestions welcomed.

Best,

Tim
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Update:

Just received a READ request from one of Hollywood's biggest Horror ProdCos. Beyond happy.

Yes, it's just a pinky toe in the door... but it's a pinky toe in the door !!!
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Congrats.

Which one?


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Quoted from TimWestland
Update:

Just received a READ request from one of Hollywood's biggest Horror ProdCos. Beyond happy.

Yes, it's just a pinky toe in the door... but it's a pinky toe in the door !!!


Bingo! Great news for you & that stinky pinky toe. You and Rod are killer.
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Awesome!!! Fingers, toes and eyes crossed!  


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Congrats.

Which one?


Hey there... this is gonna sound really stupid, but I don't know if it's OK to put that info out there. Doesn't that sound stupid? Shows my naivete, I suppose.

But you've seen the movies and TV shows this company has made.

It's certainly a long shot. That's the way these things go. But OBeast is doing well in Screencraft and the ProdCo liked the concept and pitch... so... we're keeping our fingers crossed until they break.
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Johnny and Angry Bear... and Warren, of course... Thanks!!!
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Hey there... this is gonna sound really stupid, but I don't know if it's OK to put that info out there. Doesn't that sound stupid? Shows my naivete, I suppose.


I wouldn't disclose it, Tim.

And as you know, the only stupid question you can ever ask in Hollywood is "so, what's your budget?"  
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Yeah, keep it under your hat...and good luck.
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