OK. I started reading and where do I start.
One thing to note....this is 76 pages. 70 is pushing it but man..76. I really hope that it will be worth the page count.
The formatting. I guess you don't have any software yet. Try celtx or my new favorite Writerduet. It will do all that pesky formatting for you. Which I think you might find will make your 76 pages more like 80 and you don't want that.
The introduction of "The Council", a conglomerate of the Rich and Powerful
with influence in the business, technology and science world. Spear headed
by Conny Rice, named the title "World's Most Powerful Woman". Her brand
expands around the world from pop-culture, business, media to politics.
Eastwood Pharmaceuticals, Southern based company, owned by Cotton Eastwood
a desperate old man who looks to save his family owned business established
threw a merger under Conny Rice's brand. Formed alliance with Priest a
Priest's family and Cotton Eastwood's family has ties since 1800's.
Dude what is this? This is one heck of an info-dump. And the crazy thing is everything that you jam in here and in those other info-dump paragraphs are actually really interesting. You would have been better off showing all of this instead of telling. That's what makes compelling T.V.
So, as I was reading, I noticed I was reading. This show just screams(sorry) good campy horror fun. But work on that formatting and making cuts and I think it could work.