American Scientific Adventures (Search for Mimi) by Daniel Schneider - Comedy, Mocumentary - This is the story of the hunt for a ficticious river-monster living in the Mississippi River. The script mimics real documentaries on "strange things" with a subdued, yet (hopefully) humorous poke at the "SEARCH FOR..." documentaries. It starts out dryly (like many documentaries), but soon the fun starts to show itself. - html format.

Thanks for letting me post my script. This is my first run at a screenplay. I hope those of you who take the time to read it survive your experience.  

I welcome any and all comments. I don't bruise easily so you can be honest.

Dan

Well, since I am the only one who has read it (I had to... I wrote it!), I will make a comment.

A1++++!!! The best work of comedy fiction work I have ever read! Never before has there been a more comprehensive overview of the human comedic sences! This screenplay has to be read to believed!

I laughed  , and I cried!!!  
Even did both at the same time!!!  

Wow! The writer of this screenplay has VISION!

I'd hoped it would be in a better format, you know one that i could take and read on my own accord offline but it's not

I wouldn't go calling it great, though it may very well be for a short. It's only 32 pages, yet somehow it's not in the short section

Anyways if you have it in a format like say .pdf or something else I'll give it a read

Not a problem. I was joking about it being great. Infact, I didn't think anyone would actually read my post.  

I actually didn't expect it to be great (or even all that good for that matter) since it is my first script.

I'll see if I can get it posted as a PDF for anyone interested.

Dan

I'll read it if you send me the .pdf or just post a link, it's easier to keep track of your position in the scripts that way, I'm a slow reader sometimes and when it's online it makes it harder to come back and just settle back in where you left off

The premise does sound interesting because you don't see many unproduced scripts of this nature

Done. I have put it on my server and is available for download. The address is...

http://www.slra.net/mimi.pdf

Thanks ahead of time for taking your time to look it over.

If you prefer to see it in scriptbuddy format, you can catch it at...

http://www.scriptbuddy.com/published/?p=4291527243&t=&pg=4

Dan

There are spelling mistakes and how can you INT. MISSISSIPPI HISTORY - DAY that makes no sence, that scene heading is confusing. Than your host goes into a whole bunch of narrative about facts about the river, for one did you find a fact that had all that info and than just copy it into the script?

Your host cuts himself and starts a new set of dialogue without a continued or a break for action/written views onscreen, it's like you don't know how to format right. Than we go into a "Boring office interview"? How does that  show that it's boring, it tells us. Adams is 40 something, and we are supposed to like this guy?

Than your host says the exact same lines of dialogue in a row about doctor Edmund Adams, your scene heading are really weird, how can you have an interior inside a person but than write Bambi is on a street corner?

The one good point in this screenplay is the dialogue, it's good. Though it drags on without anything happening.

My honest advice as a reader is to find somebody to help you with format and other so that this screenplay would be something that people can enjoy, good dialogue can only get you so far with nothing else.