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Posted: November 9th, 2004, 12:04pm Report to Moderator
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Caverns by Lee J. Payne - Sci Fi, B Movie - This hot spring break day, Joey & TJ lead a chosen few of their fellow SAE Brothers on an underground caving expedition in the vast mountain ranges of  New Mexico.  Spelunking through these mountains they uncover an unseen danger hidden for decades, Mutated Ants (cleverly digging themselves in among ample food) terrorizing this college community.  This discovery might end the existence of human life... if something isn’t done... fast. - fdr format.


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Posted: March 20th, 2005, 4:58pm Report to Moderator
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I have just read this script in its and I wanted to say it was an awesome script. It kept me interested from beginning to end.

One suggestion I have though is the ending.

WHY did the group head to LA? Why would LA contact them? Why would they be at the airport? You never stated that it was in the news etc so why would LA contact this group of people. ANd just reading about missing persons wouldn't make the group head out to LA and investigate.

I would suggest ending the movie with the Ants attacking the old mans companion and having him run out of the cave to lead up to a sequal.

Otherwise there was a few misspellings in dialogue that need to be cleared up. Great work though.
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