Imminent Danger by Charles Borchard  - Short, Suspense, Dark Comedy - Three friends return from a disastrous night out at the movies where a supposed riot took place. The more they discuss the events of the incident the more it sounds suspiciously like the start of an imminent invasion of mankind.  29 pages - pdf, format 8)

I'll say you have a knack for dialogue. Good work.
But there are things to work on. 1st, The opening title sequence has been done word for word in Fargo.

What movie where they at that ended at 5am during the attack?

Also, make sure you keep it in present tense. The story is interesting and I thought Gorman was kinda funny, but work on tightening descriptions and avoid too many long monologue's.

Nemo

Thanks for the feedback.

I've since shot and directed the short (though its still in editing at the moment) and the Fargo text entry isn't going to make it into the movie. The reason I put it there was for a homage to Fargo, and for the fact the movie toes the line between if it is a sci-fi/horror movie after all. I thought it would be fun to play with the audience.

I was worried that my dialogue sounds trite, or just flat out dull to listen to. You're right about the over-long monologues too. Now I've shot the film looking back there is way too much dialogue with too little action early on. On the page it doesn't seem so bad, you could read it like a stage play. But when you watch it on screen they are really just talking for around five minutes and not doing much else.

Anyway, thanks again.

Hey, I really like the script and the dialogues and the suspense in the script, still I wanna know u mentioned in the script that its a real story happened in 2012 in england, so could u help me with the case name or the incident I really wanna know about this case.

Off the bat"

Shouldn't this be "Imminent Danger?" On your title page. I don't know the word "immenent"

Always FADE IN: to any screenplay.

No need to caplock FOUR since you already CAPLOCK character names.
KAITLIN wears mittens over her messy hair - This sounds better IMO.
carry a limping TODD?

So this project has issues that can be easily corrected by using a proper template. Try "Youmescripst". It's free to use.

I'll read the rest when this is done.