Dual Relationships by John Serafinko - Short - How far is a massage therapist willing to go when life rubs him the wrong way?  A cynical massage therapist in his mid-thirties, moves his family to a new town, and gets in over his head with clients that will stop at nothing to get their way, financially or emotionally. 48 pages - pdf, format 8)

A 47 page short? I guess it does count but still.

John,

I started this and couldn't wade through it.  Too much idle chat and on the nose dialogue.  I would suggest that you pare it down drastically.  Ask yourself what is absolutely necessary and keep that.  Dump the rest.

Best
Richard