Quoted Text FADE IN LONDON 2001 |
Quoted Text EXT. COCK AND BULL PUBLIC HOUSE. LATE AFTERNOON. RAINING |
Quoted Text An old burgundy Land Rover is parked outside a typically British public house somewhere in London. Rain bounces off its bonnet with a random beat. The skies are grey, a sad winter like shade. A young boy sits in the front passenger seat, he’s around seven years old, wearing a thick coat and playing with a wooden bird. In the background is the Cock and Bull’s main bay window. |
Quoted Text The boy looks up towards the pub window, his fathers silhouette is arguing with someone. Tom leaves the pub, angry, no attempt to cover his face from the pouring rain. He sits heavily into the drivers seat. |
Quoted from Baz Thanks for the feedback! The London 2001 would be written on the screen. So using SUPR: is appreciated as I hadn’t come across it before. I’ve read a few scripts and see some do follow and some do bend the rules slightly. But what you have written is great feedback, I will go over the screenplay again and re-post. Editing unneeded text, and breaking up the descriptive text also. If you do have a chance to read the full script (painful as that must be if the work isn’t formatted correctly) any feedback towards the story would be much appreciated. I know there is a good project there, just need to chip away some more. 👍 thanks again. Baz |