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Posted by: Don, May 24th, 2020, 4:25pm
The Infernal Device by Jesson Kinder - Short, Horror - Writer’s block becomes the least of a novelist’s worries after she buys a cursed typewriter. Each story she completes leads to more blood on her hands. Can she escape the curse? 11 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Posted by: Yuvraj, May 25th, 2020, 1:12am; Reply: 1
Hey, Jesson,

I liked the way you capitalized on the concept of writer's block and turned into a nice script.

The idea of 'never-ending curse' is done before but with the idea of your's it seemed fresh. These are the few times that I truly wish that the script was longer since the idea is so nice.

I have never seen thoughts of a character been raised in a script. Since movies are meant to be solid visual medium and only the sure-shot things that visually happen to a character translate onto the script. Nonetheless, it gives a sense of anticipation and delusion so that's fine.

Really enjoyed this.

Good luck.  
Posted by: MikeCashman, May 26th, 2020, 12:32pm; Reply: 2
I really liked the concept of this script.  Done before?  Not that I know of.  While reading this script my mind kept thinking that this would be a great short script for a "Twilight Zone" type show.  A haunted typewriter won't let the story die.  Pretty cool, if you think about it.  

The story kept me interested through out.  Good job!!
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