Family Time by Jason K. Allen - Short, Horror - A family of four enjoys a quiet dinner around the table. But mom seems different tonight... 1 page - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Hi Jason

Interesting one page read - creepy. I did not get the ending.
BROTHER
No one

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at dessert.

All but for Mom are still seated at the table?

If it had read;
BROTHER
No one

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for dessert?

Then I'd have got it as; After all that just happened, the focus / interest is in the apple pie that he wants a slice of.

Yep, this one made my mouth gape open...

Absurdist splatter horror I'm guessing.

Jason, I also think that last line could do with a tweak.

Perhaps:

No takers for pie?
Anyone for pie?
Anyone for dessert?

Even: Pie looks good.