Terry and Bob by Elias Ericksson - Comedy - After twelve years of marriage an odd couple decide to break up. Only only one thing can save their relationship. The Rainbow Bud. 118 pages - pdf, format 8)

I noticed that near the beginning of your script, you say "the camera pans..." I have heard that many people on SS feel that is unnecessary and I can see why. You should take out any of the stuff in your script that has to do with a camera. We don't need to know about the camera and where it would be going if it was a movie.

One of the things I really like in your script is that you aren't afraid to say the F word. I often read scripts where it seems like the writer doesn't want to get his hands dirty. The fighting with Bob and Terry is kind of funny, but seems absolutely unrealistic. I can't imagine anything of the sort actually ever happening. Near the middle of the script, it seems to lose a lot of the comedy it had in the beginning, which was real strong.