Quoted from Sham
This was really funny, Bill. I smiled the whole way through.
I really cracked up at this little exchange:
Moments, I need fresh eyes.
Great job. This definitely stands out from the rest.
Quoted from TheRichcraft
Love how the psychic typically keeps things vague by only saying two letters and letting the officials knock themselves out trying to figure it out. Of course, the power cut could have occurred because the computers were overworked. I wonder what terms you could have come up with BO (BlackOut).
Quoted from courhaw
i'm not sure if introducing new characters so late (page 6 in this case of a 9 pg work) is not a bad habit or at least a lazy one. you're a strong writer in my opinion -- not just giving you fluff for a review either. .
Quoted from sniper
This was...okay. Inventive and definitely well-written, it even had a couple of almost-chuckle-moments but the names thing got old. Real fast. Actually, it reminded me of the Airplane skit with Roger, Oveur and Victor:
Roger Murdock: We have clearance, Clarence.
Captain Oveur: Roger, Roger. What's our vector, Victor?
Tower voice: Tower's radio clearance, over!
Captain Oveur: That's Clarence Oveur. Over.
Tower voice: Over.
Captain Oveur: Roger.
Roger Murdock: Huh?
Tower voice: Roger, over!
Roger Murdock: What?
Captain Oveur: Huh?
Victor Basta: Who?
Comedy is very very subjective and this didn't work too well for me.
Mind you i really enjoyed writing this
Quoted from Andrew
I'm really impressed with your writing, man. The writing carried me through this one. As Sniper said, comedy is so incredibly subjective and this just ain't my bag. Slightly too surreal for me. Are you a fan of The Mighty Boosh? In a way, it reminded me of that, which just goes over my head every time. It's interesting, 'cos you demo'd a completely different style of humour than that of A Girl's Best Friend. That's a testament to your writing.
There's not much else for me to add, really, 'cos I think my problem with the script is a taste issue as opposed to a quality issue.
I would love to see a drama feature from you. Send me over anything that you'd like some eyes on - I'd be very keen to give it a butchers.
Quoted from alffy
Bill, I wanted to write you a nice long review but I just raced through this, laughing to myself as I did.
I loved the character names and there were a lot of little gags in there too. I don't really have anything of worth to say; nothing negative either. I really enjoyed this from start to finish.
Quoted from Guest
I like the play on names/words - funny.
Reminds me of a Leslie Neilson comedy.
I see its light years different in tone then your latest short, Alone.
Everyone should write a True Myth because it's refreshing nonsense. I loved writing this one, and still enjoy reading it, but i accept it is very individual. We can all write the same type of scripts, so sometimes it is good to break out.
PC = power cut, the irony of it being to them rather than outside, then played upon in the fact the plug was pulled