No Reservations by Max J Gabriel - Series - A talented chef has to choose between love or his dream. 28 pages - pdf, format 8)

Hey Max,

Your logline says 6 pages but it's really 28 when I opened it up.

A few things I notice right off the bat is you need FADE IN to start the script. Also you need to CAP your characters when you first introduce them. JARED HASTING, SECRETARY and the MAN. Also it would be great to have an age associated with each of them as well.

I'm not able to read the story right now but I'll try to get to it when I have the time.

Hope this helps -

- Dirk

lol - You can ignore that last guy. "I'm not able to read it, but it needs work" was basically his comment.

Introducing your characters with ALL CAPS is optional and forgetting the FADE IN isn't a big deal.

Not finished reading this (had to comment), but I'm really liking it so far, especially the dialogue.

Quoted from Jutt lol - You can ignore that last guy. "I'm not able to read it, but it needs work" was basically his comment. Introducing your characters with ALL CAPS is optional and forgetting the FADE IN isn't a big deal. Not finished reading this (had to comment), but I'm really liking it so far, especially the dialogue.

Perhaps you should avoid criticizing other reviews. There wasn't anything questionable in Dirk's review. It's up to him whether he wants to read the entire thing or not.

It says he didn't read it. I don't know, I thought it was funny, but whatever.

Anyway, I liked No Reservations. For some reason I relate it to dry Canadian humour. Only thing I'd change is the name of the restaurant. American Broadcasting Channel might have an issue with it, but I don't know copyright laws when it comes to initialisms. No Reservations is also the name of a movie and TV show if that matters.

Good stuff though.

Hey max

I liked this script.

I assume it ends on page 28? Not a bad place to end it but maybe just put in a fade out. I wasn’t sure if there was more and I just didn’t get it or something.

I liked the characters and how they were developed. Jared is easily likable and so are the other characters. Im curious to know why anna (the rich girl) didn’t feature later on in the script? It seemed like it would suit the story if she and renee were the same character. That’s just my opinion. I thought her character was set up at the start then just disappeared.

Overall I liked it and would like to read more.

Hi Max

Interesting read. Very great plot. I was captivated from start to finish, and I forgave the fact that I was lured into reading a 28 page script when the logline stated it was 6 pages. But no matter, the script was an incredibly decent read. Very like-able characters...nothing in your script was cliche to other scripts that I read. Felt very original and on point. Your dialogue flowed very well. You could have almost turned this into a dark comedy if you were to put your mind to it...but the level of humor it had was just the perfect touch.

I would advise though that you go through your script again to revise some punctuations and tightening your descriptions here and there. Some of the stuff I read felt a little bit rushed, but with some easy fixin', should be right as rain.

Nonetheless, great script Max. Would have loved to see this on the big screen. Keep it up :)

-Silva Sly-