The Justice League Of America's Final Frontier by Curtis J Lofgren - Short, Comedy - Superman gathers his cronies together to talk about the pressing issues of the day. 11 pages - pdf, format 8)

Curtis,
This is a politically incorrect car wreck. Not sure what you hoped to accomplish here except maybe practice. I kinda wish I  had a super power psychic ability to avoid reading it :p

Tony.

Yeah, this didn't seem to have much in terms of story and it's a "lets take known superheroes and have them act as if they're on a reality tv show set". Honestly, this didn't do much for me, and as with the previous poster, this seems like practice, or a very rough draft.

Curtis,

I managed to read the whole thing, which I'm sorry to say became a chore, even at just 11 pages.  I really wanted to like this as I have fond memories of Superfriends from childhood and wanted to relive it with a bit of tongue in cheek.  Let's ignore all the mechanics mistakes you made with descriptions that wouldn't translate to the screen because there's really no point in fixing them.

Where's the story here???  It's just a desperate attempt at a string of laugh lines.  I don't care how short your story is, there has to be a beginning, middle and end.  It would be nice if there was some kind of character arc, and if not, show some consequences of the characters not arcing.  What was the point of this story except to make fun of the characters?

You did manage to have something of a theme (they're mostly gay).  Check.  But come on, that's a little tired.

I think the best thing for you to do rather than to rewrite this thing, which would be a waste of time, is to read some books on screenwriting and then start fresh with a completely new idea.  I was warned that almost everyone's first screenplay is garbage (mine was).  So congratulations, you got that out of the way.

Syd Field's Screenplay is a classic and a good place to start.  It will give you a foundation for how to write a screenplay.  I recently read Invisible Ink and The Hidden Tools of Comedy and loved both.

I'm sorry I can't be more positive here, but you are in need of a little tough love.  If anyone coddles you with this thing, they're doing you a disservice.  Read some books and you'll get better.