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Posted by: Don, September 6th, 2014, 7:40am
Trail 46 by Brian Carraher - Sci Fi, Fantasy - An experimental military drug causes a cataclysm. 110 pages - pdf, format 8)
Posted by: TonyDionisio, September 6th, 2014, 11:44am; Reply: 1
Hi Brian,

First interesting observation are exact height and weight of character introductions. Why?  Dialog is awkward and littered with tells, needs some work.

Page 10 is where it got silly. If OP is around,  will check out additional.

Gl with the script
Tony
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