Addict Episode #1 Relapse by Bryan Ugochukwu - Series, Drama - A burn out OLD stockbroker must deal with the younger ruthless crowd of stock brokers, racism, a high maintenance good for nothing wife, and the mob to survive in this high pace fast world of wall street. 60 pgs. Televsion series. Episode #1. Relapse.  - pdf, format 8)

Code Beautiful lights FLASHES randomly.

What is beautiful about the lights? Why do they flash randomly? Why is flashes in uppercase? Why is flashes plural?

Code A sports Audi pulls into a driveway of a two story house.

You're actually allowed to use 'the' here. So:

A sports Audi pulls onto the driveway of a two story house.

You also pull onto a driveway, not into it. Be a bit weird driving into the driveway.

Code RADIO STATION (O.S.) ...dollars. According to the wallstreet news... his firm made more than one billion dollars of revenue...

one billion dollars 'in' revenue.

Code DICK STRONG mans the wheel.

Really? Dick Strong? This is coming across as a joke. Is this a comedy?

Code Has the all American charm, girls love and men envy.

I'm finding that hard to picture. Are Americans known to be charming? I understand that individuals could be charming, but you're associating it with the entire country. What the fuck is American charm?

Code RADIO STATION ...gained from, some will say, unethical lending practice. Also, last night, a deadly riot at a factory broke out. Many workers killed. It -

This newsreader should consider another career.

Code He shuts off the radio.

I would too.

Code Dick sets his keys on the table, black briefcase in his hand. His home is a sight. Exotic paintings, expensive furniture. Big screen t.v. A man's wet dream.

You really need to work on your descriptions.

Quoted from Dustin You're actually allowed to use 'the' here. So: A sports Audi pulls onto the driveway of a two story house. You also pull onto a driveway, not into it. Be a bit weird driving into the driveway.

It's not weird at all. Nothing wrong with saying a car pulls into a driveway.

R

Quoted from rendevous It's not weird at all. Nothing wrong with saying a car pulls into a driveway. R

Into is used when moving within something. Like water or an enclosed space. Although I agree that a driveway could be classed as an enclosure it isn't preferable to me over the fact that 'onto' means to end a movement on a surface, which a driveway is. A driveway is more of a surface than an enclosed space. Although both can be used, to my mind it is more correct to use 'onto'.

It is weird to suggest that somebody can drive into a surface rather than onto it.

Quoted from DustinBowcot Into is used when moving within something. Like water or an enclosed space. Although I agree that a driveway could be classed as an enclosure it isn't preferable to me over the fact that 'onto' means to end a movement on a surface, which a driveway is. A driveway is more of a surface than an enclosed space. Although both can be used, to my mind it is more correct to use 'onto'. It is weird to suggest that somebody can drive into a surface rather than onto it.

Interesting. I'm not a genious when it comes to grammar but I have never heard the "onto a driverway" version before. Bear in mind, I'm only going by what sounds better but if we follow the onto-logic, wouldn't the car then by parked on the driveway, as opposed to in the driveway? A car being parked on the driveway just doesn't sound right (although maybe grammatically correct).

Yes a car would be parked on the driveway. I park my car on the drive... not in it.

For me, it only works with 'into' if they must go through a gate to get to it... as some will have to. Even then though, I'd write that they pull in through the gate and onto the driveway.

I wasn't going to comment but I can't help myself.  ;D

You give a lot of good advice to newbs Dustin,  but I can't get with your advice in this particular case. I think you're being a bit too literal in this case.  

Be a bit weird driving into the driveway.
It's regular usage imh - he's not colliding with the driveway he's pulling off a main road into an area that is designated as a parking area for a car so it's a bit like walking from one room (marked off area) into another. I agree with you regarding 'the' so as you've not got to 'a's' though.

http://dictionary.reverso.net/english-cobuild/to%20pull%20into%20the%20driveway

As an aside: I read a blacklist script script last night - one that sold for six figures, is much hyped as the next big thriller and it gained the writer a big name agent. The script has typos, grammatical errors and punctuation blunders. Story was lucklustre in my opinion as well. I think you get the gist of what I'm saying...

I don't doubt that "on" is the grammatically correct way to write it but from what I have seen/read/heard, "in" seems to be acceptable and maybe even more commonly used.

While obviously a tragic story, it would appear that even reporters don't know when to use what.

Headlines reads "Utah teen dies after being run over while sunbathing in driveway", but the caption reads "Marli Hamblin died from injuries she sustained after she was accidentally run over while sunbathing on her driveway on Friday."

It then goes back to using "in".

http://globalnews.ca/news/1504136/utah-teen-dies-after-being-run-over-while-sunbathing-in-driveway/

That's because both are acceptable... but only because both are used. It is my opinion that 'in' is incorrect. I don't classify a driveway as being an enclosed area. Maybe because I'm poor and anyone can drive onto my driveway... well they couldn't because there is only room for one car. They could park on the grass... or would that be 'in' the grass?

Incorrect is too strong. My last word on this, as I've things to do. Usage is the best example of English in action...

I'm on the motorway in England (god forbid) and I'm tired, I pull into a layby for a rest.

It is to do with movement from the road, and words have many meanings, dependent on usage. I could be more specific, but I do i get that feeling of micturation against the breeze. And this is small stuff, dependent on intuition.

Now, I'm tired. Going for a wee. Later...

R

First and foremost I want to thank everyone for their comments give me a few days to return the favor. As for grammer I do admit that it is very weak and it's time for me to bring out the old English text book. Lol. I keep everything in mind for the next script. Good looking out.

Hey Ugo, you've been super active around these forums and I understand the frustrations of writing. I noticed you had issues with correct grammar and syntax, and you may have gotten this suggestion before, but just in case I recommend "The Elements of Style" by Strunk and White, possibly the most popular general guide to English.

i haven't. i'll look into buying the book. thanks Josh!!!

good looking out