Insight by Richard Russell - Short, Drama - A man finds a way to us his unique foresight to  make money. 9 pages - pdf, format 8)

I liked this, nice idea and flowed well... I think there's an issue with the logic at the end with Ted, but just might be me...

Good job.

I think you're missing an e from your logline. I don't have any e's, although I've heard they are very popular with the younger types.

Wet bar. Not a term I'm too familiar with. But then there's a whole warehouse of stuff I don't know. As he gets whiskey from it I think just 'bar' would have served better.

Intriguing start. The dialogue could probably do with trimming a little. But maybe two charismatic actors could make it work.

There's something weird going on with the spacing in your dialogue in parts. Either that or I'm seeing things. It looks like some of it has been justified, like they do in newspapers. It should be just left aligned.

p5 - Boinking her? Sounds a bit too silly. I'm all for silly, but that spot there wasn't the time or the place. It takes the weight out of what he is saying. Banging would work better.

Felt a little messy towards the end. There is a good idea here, but it needs a bit more work.

R

I had to read the scene in Ted's office a few times to understand what happened.  My first initial thought was that they both new Paul was going to die and had worked together to scam him.  But after reading it a few times I realized what actually happened.  As far as advice if there's anything that could be fixed up, I'm still a newbie to screenwriting so I probably won't catch much unless it's blatantly obvious :P.  

But maybe take a look at the interaction between Ted and Alfred?  I'm a little slow sometimes too though, so it could just be me!

It was certainly intriguing enough for me to read it a few times to figure it out, if that's worth anything.

Nolan