Not Today, Gucci by 0 - Short, Comedy - Super heroes, Aussies, Walmarts and eyeless crocodiles -- this is the story of the Doctor. 6 pages - pdf, format 8)

Yikes, I guess the author has probably quite some problems. And me too, as I couldn't stop laughing. Extremely weird but funny!

Wow...obviously a complete pisser...and quite a whacky one, too.

Too whacky for this old whack, and I'm out on Page 2, as this is completely senseless.

If a schizophrenic screenwriter took acid and was given 30 minutes to write a stream-of-consciousness story with absolutely no f*cks given, I expect this would be the result.

I'm sorry, but, I'm out on page 3.  I said I'd never bail, but, I can't follow it.  I know I'm legally high and all, but, I don't think anyone can follow this trip.

Sorry, I truly am.

Dan

Well, it doesn't make sense, but the scenes alone are so weird, it made me laugh, and that's what comedy is about after all, isn't it? Never thought I'd ever like a script which doesn't make sense.

The first two scares are very good but then you jumped and introduced crocodiles... yeah... I have no idea why.

In the end I don't know what I just read and why you would write that. Not funny

Madcap at best.

Started out promising but lost the plot even by my crazy standards lol

1 laugh out of 10 for the Aussie reference lol

What the hell? I got through page three and couldn't take any more. Just not my thing.
So, yeah, it'll probably be some kind of cult classic. I wouldn't be surprised at all.

Ahhh what?????

I could read this over and over and still have no clue what's going on? Are there 3 different stories?

My head hurts trying to make sense of it.


All I can say is good job on entering.

I said that I'm not going to hate on any one of these entries, so, nice work for having a go.

Reads like a pisser, but for once I’m sure pissers are allowed and encouraged.

Far too crazy and incoherent for my tastes but I appreciate the mad as a box of frogs effort that’s gone into this and I know some will love you for it.

-Mark

Writer,

I try not to bail on scripts but I can't help it here. Out by page 4 and there's no let up to what I'm reading. Agree with Jeff -- senseless. WTF were you on when you wrote this!

Steve

Not for me.

I don't know man, I read almost all the entries by now and intend to finish them all, but this one I had to abort on page 3, not that my opinion matters. Sorry.

To critique in the lexicon as presented:  Super Fucked

lost me at page two.  Sorry.

I have a feeling this reads exactly how the writer intended it to. I expect the comments do as well. No laughs from me though. Not much else to say, really.

Chaotic.

The writer set up a difficult task - to find humor in scenes where a pregnant woman is punched in the stomach, after delivery shot by the Doctor and a baby kicked out the window. I think that is an impossible task. Good job on entering.

Dear god that was a bit mental. Reading the comments I kinda feel embarrassed to admit that I actually laughed a few times, however I think that was more to do with how mad the whole thing was, rather than any actual comedy.

Absolutely bonkers, doesn't make any sense, not really my thing. Well done for taking the time to enter

I think the stuff with the birth almost offended common decency if you'd film that; though I forgave you that when you brought in Cozco that devilish poor soul from a previous owc. What can I say. I believe it or not that I've read this whole absurdity. Credits for weirdness. I definitely had fun with your psycho-gram here, giving us an insight behind the curtains of madness. So, I give you the last word and quote from the exquisite climax of your pisser:

"The Eyeless Nurse break dances her way out the window and soars away like an Emu."

I got a couple laughs from the first page, but something seemed off about the writing...

“Oh, fuck, I ran out of pages.”

Yeah, that’s about right. Thanks for playing.

Couldn't get through this one. Absolutely mental! But, for me anyway, not in a good way.

Glenn.

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What the fuck....?