Cozen by Mica - Short, Thriller - A con man(Lesley Watts) steals a painting from a Russian mafia, for homeland. When the Russian mafia finds him, he forces him to commit treason. 6 pages - pdf, format

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Some notes.

First, this one needs some work.  The use of 'we see, hear, notice...' is passe.  Use simple direct sentences to describe the scene.  The reader knows 'we see'.  

The opening bit of dialogue 'this is the part I should  have died' makes no sense.  

Old, It has that abandoned building fill to it'  It's not 'fill' but 'feel'.

'quiet'  does not equal 'quite'

When characters are introduced, their NAMES are CAPITALIZED.

Then, this one ends with no resolution and no move back to the opening scene.  

I suggest you study English and the excellent scripts on this site.  

Best
Richard

Why did you tell the reader Sam's about to rob the drug dealer? I thought that spoiled the surprise. There are quite a few spelling and grammar mistakes in this, but your script isn't too bad. I don't know much about drug dealing, but isn't 30 dollars too small an amount of money to risk robbing someone for?