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Posted by: Don, March 19th, 2017, 5:59pm
Outsourcing by Richard F. Russell - Short, Drama - Lon could use a miracle or two in his life. Instead, he gets a job offer from an elf. 14 pages - pdf, format
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Posted by: Erica, March 24th, 2017, 9:27am; Reply: 1
I found this to be an interesting concept. Not sure if it could have explained more why Santa wasn't around and they needed the help. That' was the only thing I wasn't sure about.
Personally I found the name "Lon" strange, I've never heard of that name before but I'm sure it's just me.
Lon's line seem strange here, maybe a typo?
Quoted Text
RALPH I know about your day job at the concrete plant. LON Or how you know what you know.