Game by David Jean Louis - Short, Horror - When a female scientist wakes up in a deserted, dystopian city-scape, she struggles to investigate what happened to all the missing inhabitants while at the same time discovering that during the cover of night, she is not alone. - pdf, format

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Hello, your script is too long for a short, and too short for a feature. At 50 pages, this script might as well be the pilot episode for a series.

I would recommend maybe lengthening this out, this seems like a very interesting story that could easily lend itself to a 90 page feature screenplay.

Nonetheless I read the first couple of pages and there are many mistakes. I can provide you with a couple of examples.

Code EXT. BUILDING ROOFTOP - DAY No longer at a black screen

This action line is unnecessary, we know we aren't looking at a black screen anymore because you already placed the scene at a Rooftop in your slugline.

Code She has smeared make up and bags under her eyes from lack of sleep

Get rid of the "lack of sleep" bit, we can already conclude that's the case from the bags under her eyes. I would recommend this because:
1) Screenplays are solely for what the audience can directly see
2) It reads a bit amateurish.

Code Alex is looking through binoculars

Change to Alex looks through binoculars

There are more mistakes, but I can't get though all of them. My advice for you would be to read many more screenplays, it has helped me tremendously.

Best of Luck,
Luis