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Posted by: Don, June 24th, 2017, 6:27pm
Unbreakable Bond by Bernard Mersier - Drama - Childhood friends make a pact through thick and thin they'll remain friends. 80 pages - pdf format

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Posted by: Patrick, June 25th, 2017, 1:02pm; Reply: 1
The water mark needs to go. Keep the title to 12 point courier, your opening dialogue is V.O a big no, no. As it can be seen as lazy writing. Your discriptions, are long less is more. This requires a lot of reading. A potential producer will get board quckly and pass.
Posted by: eldave1, June 25th, 2017, 2:01pm; Reply: 2
I actually like Bernard's stuff - at least the few pages I have read on other works. But I am simply not going to deal with the watermarks.
Posted by: Don, March 15th, 2018, 4:49pm; Reply: 3
The watermark was removed for easy reading.

- Don
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