I've Lived 400,000 Times by Farrah Ventenilla Hamada - Short, Comedy - Freddie, the protagonist recounts some of his past lives and gets to resolve his mental illness by chance by getting an amnesia. 15 pages - pdf, format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

A lot of formatting issues out of the shoot including the Title Page.

No need ti number scene headings

You simply can't do stuff like this:

Quoted Text (Note: Actions take place as the narrator describes the scenes that are going to happen.)

You have to describe the actual actions

Yep, what Dave said re formatting, really all over the place. Have a little look around the site and try to copy the formatting methods from others, and integrate them into the work.

As a quick aside, you nearly went a little bit Scottish there Dave:

Quoted from eldave1 No need ti number scene headings

However, we prefer it to be "tae", which can add vague amounts of humour or confusion to a sentence. It can also be used in a threatening manner too (Billy Connolly's quite good at it), as in "get tae f..." and so on.

Anyway, I digress, keep at it Ventenilla, best of luck,

Cam

Quoted from Cameron Yep, what Dave said re formatting, really all over the place. Have a little look around the site and try to copy the formatting methods from others, and integrate them into the work. As a quick aside, you nearly went a little bit Scottish there Dave: However, we prefer it to be "tae", which can add vague amounts of humour or confusion to a sentence. It can also be used in a threatening manner too (Billy Connolly's quite good at it), as in "get tae f..." and so on. Anyway, I digress, keep at it Ventenilla, best of luck, Cam

Wow - I must have some Scottish DNA lurking around somewhere

Quoted from eldave1 Wow - I must have some Scottish DNA lurking around somewhere

Yep, historically we did get about the world a fair bit so there's always a chance! Only one hitch I can see, your name would have to to be less eldave and more McDave.

It's actually Lambertson - so maybe

Er yep, that'll about bloody well do it, congratulations on the heritage!!

thanks for all the comments, guys.

Quoted from Farrah thanks for all the comments, guys.

No problem - best of luck

Hi Farrah,

This was difficult to get through because of the formatting etc, but I really liked the premise and the depth to it. I could see you put a lot of thought into this and that shows.

hi there kirsten,

could you be more specific with regards to formatting?