Marmalade Sunrise by Nathan Illsley - Drama, Sci Fi - A recently-separated music journalist travels to Upstate New York to interview a widower who claims he was once transported to an alternate dimension where the Beatles never broke up. Initially a skeptic, he comes to realize that not everything is as black and white as he previously thought. 86 pages

production: Microbudget script, two leads, several supporting characters, only a handful of locations. Drama with a subtle sci-fi undertone, but the script focuses on the relationship between the two men as the main plot. - pdf, format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Hey Nate,

This is really fun read. Reminded me of "Safety Not Guaranteed". It has all the ingredients at right place. Kudos for the writing.

Now, what I will suggest is,

Right now PETER is not coming out as an complete asshole in the beginning. The opening scene can be changed in a way where we can see, he don't care for other's feelings or he is stubborn. That way the climax will complete his character arc perfectly.

If possible, he should hurt BENNETT with his words more about his wife and daughter near the pole. Like it's a final confrontation between those two and BENNETT is devastated by it.

After that when PETER is talking and apologizing to Em, she can encourage him to go and apologize to BENNETT too or else he may hurt himself.

I think, this will create a conflict or sense of urgency in my opinion. (which is there, but you can always go for more.)

Again, these are just my thoughts. Other than this, it's a solid write.