How my boyfriend ruined my date by Mica - Short, Comedy - A new friendship is formed, when a woman is caught on a date by her boyfriend. 6 pages - pdf format

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You've got the bones here for something good, it just needs some proofreading and dialogue tightening. I genuinely chuckled (in a good way) with some of the lines. You've got a knack for one-liners. Keep at it.

Some of the dialog is funny, just needs to be better written. The logline is confusing, but after reading the script it makes a bit of sense. Again, just check some grammar.