The First Psychonaut by Stephen Arthur - Short, Comedy - Mission Control and psychedelics: a pioneer is on a voyage into inner space. A parody suitable for Saturday Night Live. 5 pages - pdf format

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WOW.. We have come along way in our writing. A lot has changed since 1981

Since no one's jumped on this yet, I'll give you my impression. It's definitely feels more like a SNL or Mad TV skit rather than a story.  I'm not so close to this genre, and the fact it's a draft from 1981.  Not sure where I was back then. ;D  So, I think I'd be doing you a disservice by critiquing this. However, I will say this: it's a very difficult genre to write... far far far more difficult than it seems, so to elicit a laugh is quite an achievement. I laughed.  

Hope you're around, to find out your experiences.-A