High 5 Beauty Pageant by Jon Tilson - Short, Comedy - Something went wrong during the first annaul High 5 Beauty Pageant.10 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

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Hello, I'm Jon and this is the first script I have written and produced. I'm new to the site and wanted to post my own work before I commented on others. Any and all feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thanks!

High 5 Beauty Pageant (EXTENDED DIRECTOR'S CUT): https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Cq9z9zwM0Dg

Quoted from eldave1 script not found

Fixed.

I'm still not able to locate the script, do you have a link?

Quoted from Modest_Potist I'm still not able to locate the script, do you have a link?

Don fixed the link.
Just click on the bolded script title in the OP and the script will open.

Welcome to SS, Jon!

A helpful link for you below. :)

https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-cc/m-1124159895/

Thanks, I appreciate it!

The script itself is not at all in the proper format. Headers are wrong, characters are not properly introduced, camera directions submitted withing dialogue, etc.

So - bottom line - this is not really a "script". It's words on paper that you are filming.

So - if you are going to film all of your own stuff - I guess it doesn't matter. But if you are serious about writing scripts - you need to learn the basics.  - there are a ton here you can view as well is some basic Googling (how to write a scene heading, how to write a dialogue block, etc. etc,).

Best of luck

Quoted from eldave1 The script itself is not at all in the proper format. Headers are wrong, characters are not properly introduced, camera directions submitted withing dialogue, etc. So - bottom line - this is not really a "script". It's words on paper that you are filming. So - if you are going to film all of your own stuff - I guess it doesn't matter. But if you are serious about writing scripts - you need to learn the basics.  - there are a ton here you can view as well is some basic Googling (how to write a scene heading, how to write a dialogue block, etc. etc,). Best of luck

I appreciate the feedback and will look for ways to improve on my next project. Thanks!

Quoted from Modest_Potist I appreciate the feedback and will look for ways to improve on my next project. Thanks!

No problem.  Best of luck

All said about formating. I read through it, reading only the dialog to see a story. There was no real story were for me. That's just my take.