My 1 and Only (feature) by Bernard Antoine Mersier - Drama - Christopher is a dedicated father who is falsely accused by the mother of his daughter, leading to him doing time in jail creating a new hatred towards her once he's released. 92 pages

Synopsis; Production

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Hi, Bernard.

I read the first few pages and here are some of my notes:

• You should have a copyright symbol and year on the cover sheet to protect yourself.
  
• The quote on page 1 is going to turn a lot of people off. Does it appear on screen? Is this the moral of the script? Why is this here?
  
• Your script reads more like a novel than a screenplay.
  
• You should write in an active voice instead of a passive voice.
  
• You have two main characters named Christian and Christopher. That will get confusing very quickly. Change one of the names to be completely different.
  

That's about all I have from skimming the first few pages.

-Jordan