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Posted by: Don, February 19th, 2022, 10:35am
There were 16 entries by 16 writers.

I'll Love You Forever by 0 - Short, Horror - A cheater is forced to deal with his girlfriend's deranged brothers after cheating on their sister.

Pure Love by blank - Short, Drama - A young man set out to propose the girl of his dreams.

Valentine's Day by A Horny Devil - Short, Drama - An affair leads to more when two people just can’t get enough.

Love & Illusion by Author's Name - Short, Drama - A man's abnormal relationship gets shattered when another woman enters the picture.

You Can't Hurry Love by Phil Collins - Short, Comedy - Good things don't always come to those who wait

From What We Were by Unknown - Short, Drama - A woman, the Golden Gate Bridge and a story of fate that will leave you scarred.

The Confession: A Farce by Gordan Greene - Short, Comedy, Drama, Farce - One evening, David Smith visits his church and confesses to a priest that he's had an extramarital affair with a mistress. A miscommunication causes a case of mistaken identity, leading to a farcical conversation between parishioner and pastor.

She by Her - Short, Horror - An artist is haunted by a familiar face.

Wrath by Alfredo Bravo de Rueda - Short, Drama, Horror - A traumatized veteran destroys what he loves the most and, with that, all hope to find happiness in this life.

Chewing the Bowstrings by Little Indian - Short, Crime, Thriller - Starting a new life, a couple stumble upon a double edged opportunity: an unattended heist score.

Aleena and Rollie by Jimmy Gator - Short, Drama, Crime - A bag of cash complicates the romance of campus misfits Aleena and Rollie.  

Unwanted Temptation by Fabio Lanzoni - Short, Comedy - A factory worker in a sexless marriage has a voluptuous horny boss... What could go wrong?

Loves Me Not by James Whale and Boris Karloff - Short, Horror - A hopeless romantic desperately searches for the perfect girlfriend.

LOVEnvy by Hans Bellmer - Short, Romance - In the 21st Century what we covet is only a UPS delivery away.

Pride Before The Fail by No F*&king Idea - Short, Crime - A writer is willing to sacrifice himself and others for notoriety.

Chocolate Love by The sToryTeLleR - Short, Comedy - The short comedy about a dentist and his desperate mission to save the teeth of a weird kiddo.  
Posted by: Zack, February 19th, 2022, 10:39am; Reply: 1
I'm counting 14 scripts. Am I dumb?

Either way, great turnout! Thanks for getting this all together, Don. You're awesome! ;D

Time to dive in and start reading. :)
Posted by: Don, February 19th, 2022, 10:45am; Reply: 2

Quoted from Zack
I'm counting 14 scripts. Am I dumb?

Either way, great turnout! Thanks for getting this all together, Don. You're awesome! ;D

Time to dive in and start reading. :)


I have one mystery writer who needs to make themselves known to me and then I'll post their script. So, no. No, Zack, you are not dumb.

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Don's Edit:

Mystery solved.  15 scripts by 15 writers

- Don
Posted by: Zack, February 19th, 2022, 10:52am; Reply: 3

Quoted from Don


So, no. No, Zack, you are not dumb.


Derp derp.  :P :)
Posted by: eldave1, February 19th, 2022, 12:15pm; Reply: 4
I am outing myself.

I wrote PRIDE BEFORE THE FAIL.

It clearly does not meet the parameters. My bad - in my haste yesterday all I saw was OPEN GENRE and SEVEN DEADLY SINS and I totally missed - A LOVE STORY.

Believe me, if I thought there was some contorted logic that could justify this as a love story, yours truly would exploit that. There isn't. Please don't vote on it - read it if you want. But consider it a DQ.

Look forward to seeing what you all come  up with.
Posted by: irish eyes, February 19th, 2022, 1:02pm; Reply: 5
I'm guessing Dave wrote PRIDE BEFORE THE FAIL.

Just seems like his style of writing ;D  
Posted by: realxwriter, February 19th, 2022, 1:50pm; Reply: 6
Do we have a week to review the scripts?
Posted by: Grandma Bear, February 19th, 2022, 2:05pm; Reply: 7

Quoted from realxwriter
Do we have a week to review the scripts?


Yes. Don will send out voting lists to those who entered and to those who didn't, but read the scripts at that time as well, then we have a week or so to guess before the reveal.  :)
Posted by: Don, February 19th, 2022, 3:49pm; Reply: 8

Quoted from realxwriter
Do we have a week to review the scripts?


Yes.  At least.  score sheet will go out tomorrow.

Don
Posted by: LC, February 19th, 2022, 4:12pm; Reply: 9
I could be wrong, but have a feeling, Dave, you won't be the only one...

Great to see the turnout!  :D
Posted by: eldave1, February 19th, 2022, 4:52pm; Reply: 10

Quoted from irish eyes
I'm guessing Dave wrote PRIDE BEFORE THE FAIL.

Just seems like his style of writing ;D  


The bold headers I presume :)
Posted by: eldave1, February 19th, 2022, 4:54pm; Reply: 11

Quoted from LC
I could be wrong, but have a feeling, Dave, you won't be the only one...

Great to see the turnout!  :D


Perhaps. But I'm going to claim the biggest miss.... Wonder if I could claim it was written with love. . ?
Posted by: LC, February 19th, 2022, 5:00pm; Reply: 12

Quoted from eldave1
...Wonder if I could claim it was written with love. . ?

Haha! Yes!  ;D
Posted by: LC, February 19th, 2022, 6:11pm; Reply: 13
A friendly reminder as per Don's instructions:

Please do not rate scripts in your review.

Save your scores for the ballot.  :D
Posted by: irish eyes, February 19th, 2022, 6:51pm; Reply: 14
All read

Thanks Don for another wonderful OWC .

Great entries folks

You sure are a talented bunch :)
Posted by: eldave1, February 20th, 2022, 12:54pm; Reply: 15
Okay - I have read them all - nice work peeps.

I have four in my top tier - will need to take another look at each of these to see if one stands out above the others.  

I do like the open genre = it makes the reads much more enjoyable not seeing similar stories one after another.

There was only one script that I DQ'd. Some arse can't read parameters apparently. The others were all close enough not to make a deal of it. Several nailing it right on the head.

Posted by: realxwriter, February 21st, 2022, 5:00am; Reply: 16
I just want to point out that my reviews may seem harsher than they are intended to be because I skip the compliments parts. I know a good review should have both the positives and the negatives to both encourage and guide the writer in his next rewrite or any upcoming project. However, I tend to skip complimenting anything on the hope that the writer will try to improve even the good elements of his script.

For example, if I said the dialogue was great, the odds are you won't tackle that in your next rewrite. You may even get the illusion that you don't have to work on your dialogue skills any more because you've perfected the skill. And that's death to any writer. When we stop making progress, we're just dead people walking.

What I do, is I point out what's not working and ignore what is. So please, if you read my review of your work, know  that my silence on certain elements of your script is my own way of complimenting them. I'm weird this way. Don't stop your hunt for perfection or your creative heart will flat-line.
Posted by: eldave1, February 21st, 2022, 11:04am; Reply: 17

Quoted from realxwriter
I just want to point out that my reviews may seem harsher than they are intended to be because I skip the compliments parts. I know a good review should have both the positives and the negatives to both encourage and guide the writer in his next rewrite or any upcoming project. However, I tend to skip complimenting anything on the hope that the writer will try to improve even the good elements of his script.

For example, if I said the dialogue was great, the odds are you won't tackle that in your next rewrite. You may even get the illusion that you don't have to work on your dialogue skills any more because you've perfected the skill. And that's death to any writer. When we stop making progress, we're just dead people walking.

What I do, is I point out what's not working and ignore what is. So please, if you read my review of your work, know  that my silence on certain elements of your script is my own way of complimenting them. I'm weird this way. Don't stop your hunt for perfection or your creative heart will flat-line.


For what it is worth - I didn't see where any of your comments would cause a problem. Writers should be delighted to get constructive criticism. All of your was in that vein.

If you are concerned - you can simply cut and paste a standard statement on each of your review - e.g., There was a lot of things I liked about the script. For the sake of brevity, I am only going to list the things that concerned me or that I had questions on,

I usually put something like that upfront when I do script exchanges -

Posted by: realxwriter, February 21st, 2022, 3:12pm; Reply: 18

Quoted from eldave1


If you are concerned - you can simply cut and paste a standard statement on each of your review - e.g., There was a lot of things I liked about the script. For the sake of brevity, I am only going to list the things that concerned me or that I had questions on,

I usually put something like that upfront when I do script exchanges -



Some sort of disclaimer. Brilliant! That should do it.
Posted by: LC, February 21st, 2022, 8:41pm; Reply: 19
A heads-up to all those entering your first OWC, remember to remain anonymous until reviewing is done.

No outing yourselves as writer yet.  :D
Posted by: Grandma Bear, February 23rd, 2022, 10:47am; Reply: 20
Voted!

I forgot, when is the voting due and when can we start guessing?

FWIW, the Sloth script played well with me.  ;D
Posted by: Don, February 23rd, 2022, 2:33pm; Reply: 21
Voting is due Friday midnight.  Do Not For Get to Put You Name on the Ballot.

Please.  Who Wrote what guesses open - Don't look at it until  you've voted.

- Don
Posted by: Grandma Bear, February 25th, 2022, 7:33am; Reply: 22
Realxwriter, I think this is a review and you posted in the wrong thread?  :)
Posted by: ReneC, February 25th, 2022, 6:30pm; Reply: 23
I'm really impressed by this round of entries. There are some great stories and some great writing on display. Love and deadly sins is a match made in heaven, reading these was a pleasure.

I can't wait to find out who wrote some of them.
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