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Don |
Posted: May 17th, 2010, 5:33pm |
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AdministratorAdministrator So, what are you writing?
LocationVirginia Posts16449 Posts Per Day 1.94 |
No Meat by Anonymous - Short, Drama - Ronald and Katherine are carnivores. Abigail is a vegan. What does a backyard BBQ have to do with an eggplant? - doc, format |
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Dreamscale |
Posted: May 17th, 2010, 7:34pm |
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OK, someone is definitely fucking around here...at least I hope so.
Seriously, some of the best worst dialogue ever. Truly hysterical.
Descriptions are also awful. I don't think there's a single comma in here.
BUT, I actually did laugh at the end. Funny stuff, but I'm 98% sure this is another pissatke...if not, could be 1 of the worst scripts I've ever seen. |
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stevie |
Posted: May 17th, 2010, 7:44pm |
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Of The Ancients
LocationDown Under Posts3441 Posts Per Day 0.61 |
Yeah, this was a pisstake BUT at least it was reasonably funny! A pisstake has to be funny to succeed!
I'd like to see this filmed. J Bush could play Ronald. Michael could even do it as a machinima. |
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James McClung |
Posted: May 17th, 2010, 7:53pm |
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Of The Ancients
LocationWashington, D.C. Posts3293 Posts Per Day 0.48 |
Well, that was fun. Not even gonna bother reviewing it proper-like. It's a joke and it worked. Kudos! |
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greg |
Posted: May 17th, 2010, 8:01pm |
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LocationSan Diego, California Posts1680 Posts Per Day 0.24 |
Well, unlike the other pisstakes I won't call this a complete waste of time as it was actually pretty funny.
Got some formatting gaffes you need to fix. |
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Dreamscale |
Posted: May 17th, 2010, 8:10pm |
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YES! I want to play Ronald.
I think I could deliver those witty lines of his quite well. The dialogue exchanges sound so realistic! |
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Trojan |
Posted: May 17th, 2010, 9:02pm |
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LocationAustralia Posts393 Posts Per Day 0.07 |
Haha this was pretty funny, obviously no need to comment on anything as it was just someone taking the piss. Good job though.
Cheers, Tim. |
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Ryan1 |
Posted: May 17th, 2010, 9:07pm |
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Old Timer
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Good old Ronald. Lord of the eggplants.
This dialogue would make sense if all three of them had been lobotomized. Well, at least you went for a laugh. |
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MBCgirl |
Posted: May 17th, 2010, 11:26pm |
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New Some things are better left to the imagination!
LocationScottsdale Posts385 Posts Per Day 0.07 |
Short and...the eggplant fell into the pool! Oh my gosh...as bad as it is...truly bad grammatically...it is TRULY funny and I think the story line is pretty clever and off the normal, over beaten, path. I laughed all the way to the end.
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michel |
Posted: May 18th, 2010, 2:33am |
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LocationFrance Posts1156 Posts Per Day 0.18 |
This one wants to be daring but the treatment and the dialogs are very poor. Sounds like a (very) bad porn from the 70' to me. Michel |
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grademan |
Posted: May 18th, 2010, 8:44am |
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LocationWisconsin Posts872 Posts Per Day 0.16 |
A guy and two vegan lesbians talking by the pool. And the guy's wearing a tight white speedo. I agree with Michel, this is a lost script from the 70's porn vault. Poorly done with a chuckle. OK, who around here writes in MS Word? |
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pwhitcroft |
Posted: May 18th, 2010, 5:53pm |
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Okay so you’re doing the jokey porn thing. Overall that’s a mildly amusing waste of time. |
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Sandra Elstree. |
Posted: May 18th, 2010, 7:10pm |
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Of The Ancients What if the Hokey Pokey, IS what it's all about?
LocationBowden, Alberta Posts3664 Posts Per Day 0.60 |
Someone's having fun around here! RONALD Hi Katherine, how are you? KATHERINE Well, I keep getting wedgies from my teeny weeny bikini, but otherwise I'm fine. Whatcha doin'? RONALD Just hosin'. ABIGAIL What am I doing in this script if I don't get to have a threesome? RONALD Sorry, I'm just the eggplant man. I tried my best. I enjoyed this one. Splendid piece of crap! Sandra |
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Ledbetter |
Posted: May 18th, 2010, 9:54pm |
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Priceless. I mean this is priceless. A funny absolute snapshot of perfection. It takes you on a journey to where? Your soul. If you did not feel that with this script, start sizing yourself for a coffen, because you are already dead.
I wept. Bitterly at first, then as an elderly man in soiled depends.
If I were the editor of HUSTLER, I would give this 4 straight up boners.
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TheRichcraft |
Posted: May 20th, 2010, 1:26pm |
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Now you guys don't be making fun of 1970s porn plots. They were much more believable than this script. |
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