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Mr. Blonde |
Posted: June 28th, 2019, 10:57pm |
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LocationNowhere special. Posts3064 Posts Per Day 0.57 |
So, it's finally Round 5. It's only been five weeks? How is that even possible? Sometimes, you need to experience a complete breakdown in order to move on with life, I guess. Anyway... Genre: Sci-Fi.
Location: Broken Down Car.
Object: Handsaw.Good luck. +++ Submit to SimplyScripts.com/OWC +++ |
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Zack |
Posted: June 28th, 2019, 11:03pm |
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This should be interesting. |
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Warren |
Posted: June 28th, 2019, 11:03pm |
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LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
Brutal. Not a car again |
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ReneC |
Posted: June 28th, 2019, 11:09pm |
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Oh boy...
Should be interesting. |
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Warren |
Posted: June 28th, 2019, 11:13pm |
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LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
Okay, despite my initial moaning and dismay( 10 minutes ago )I already have a full formed idea that I'm quite happy with. No writing for me today, but I'll play around with it in my head and put a first draft down tomorrow some time. |
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Warren |
Posted: June 28th, 2019, 11:26pm |
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LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
I had to get this idea down on paper, and I have to say, I'm really looking forward to writing this script.
Sean you really do inspire creativity with these ridiculous sets of criteria. |
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Mr. Blonde |
Posted: June 28th, 2019, 11:32pm |
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LocationNowhere special. Posts3064 Posts Per Day 0.57 |
Sean you really do inspire creativity with these ridiculous sets of criteria. |
That's what you guys pay me for. |
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Warren |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 12:01am |
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LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
That's what you guys pay me for.
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PKCardinal |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 12:17am |
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The Warren grows stronger. |
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ReneC |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 12:22am |
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LocationVancouver, BC Posts1435 Posts Per Day 0.31 |
The Warren is strong. The Warren is wise. |
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ReneC |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 12:26am |
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LocationVancouver, BC Posts1435 Posts Per Day 0.31 |
A handsaw is the most un-sci-fi thing...what the serious fuck.
This is going to be a gong show. |
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Scar Tissue Films |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 12:27am |
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Glad I'm out of this one! |
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ReneC |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 12:31am |
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LocationVancouver, BC Posts1435 Posts Per Day 0.31 |
Glad I'm out of this one! |
I can't wait to see what Sober Rene dreams up for this one! |
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DustinBowcot |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 12:36am |
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I can't wait to see what Sober Rene dreams up for this one! |
There's a sober Rene? |
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ReneC |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 12:41am |
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LocationVancouver, BC Posts1435 Posts Per Day 0.31 |
Quoted from DustinBowcot
There's a sober Rene?
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I'd like to think so, but it's becoming more and more mythical. Practically an urban legend now. |
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DustinBowcot |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 12:58am |
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I'd like to think so, but it's becoming more and more mythical. Practically an urban legend now.
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Haha... nice one. |
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Gary in Houston |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 1:05am |
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Finished. Saved my worst for last but I’m not changing a word. |
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Warren |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 2:56am |
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LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
The Warren is strong. The Warren is wise. |
Wise may be taking it a step too far :p |
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Warren |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 2:58am |
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LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
Libby, you going to be playing in the final round? |
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LC |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 3:13am |
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LocationThe Great Southern Land Posts7644 Posts Per Day 1.34 |
If a good idea strikes... Hmm, not sure ... Car. Sean, can we extend this to vehicle of some sort? |
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FrankM |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 8:33am |
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LocationBetween Chair and Keyboard Posts1447 Posts Per Day 0.62 |
A handsaw is the most un-sci-fi thing...what the serious fuck.
This is going to be a gong show. |
I mean, duct tape I could understand in a sci-fi story... it can fix just about anything. But if you thought the hand sanitizer felt shoe-horned into stories, just watch out for this next batch. |
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AnthonyCawood |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 8:44am |
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LocationUK Posts4324 Posts Per Day 1.13 |
I had a great idea this morning, then I re-read the criteria and it evaporated ;-(
Back to the drawing board. |
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Zack |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 8:47am |
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LocationErlanger, KY Posts4504 Posts Per Day 0.69 |
Think I'm gonna bow out for the final round. Nothing is coming to me for the parameters and I don't want to put out another crap show like my round 4 script. I'll still try to read as much as I can. Thanks for doing this, Sean and Don. It's been fun. Good luck, everyone. |
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Matthew Taylor |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 10:05am |
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LocationShakespeare's county Posts1770 Posts Per Day 0.87 |
Think I'm gonna bow out for the final round. Nothing is coming to me for the parameters and I don't want to put out another crap show like my round 4 script. I'll still try to read as much as I can. Thanks for doing this, Sean and Don. It's been fun. Good luck, everyone. |
Come on Zack, you can see this thing through! I know which round 4 entry is yours and considering you said it was 1 hours work, it's far from a crap show. The premise is fine, if you had more time to fine tune it would be the kind of story I would really enjoy. |
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Mr. Blonde |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 10:13am |
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LocationNowhere special. Posts3064 Posts Per Day 0.57 |
Sean, can we extend this to vehicle of some sort? |
Not entirely. Road vehicle, four wheels. Beyond that, you're at the reviewers' mercy. |
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Matthew Taylor |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 10:16am |
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LocationShakespeare's county Posts1770 Posts Per Day 0.87 |
I have a great idea. Round 5 is mine |
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eldave1 |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 10:52am |
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LocationSouthern California Posts6875 Posts Per Day 1.93 |
Hacksaw ...
Would using Jack Reynolds as your protag count?
Good luck to all |
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ReneC |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 11:27am |
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Not entirely. Road vehicle, four wheels. Beyond that, you're at the reviewers' mercy.
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Some cars have three wheels. Sober Rene's got this. |
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Zack |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 12:50pm |
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LocationErlanger, KY Posts4504 Posts Per Day 0.69 |
Come on Zack, you can see this thing through! I know which round 4 entry is yours and considering you said it was 1 hours work, it's far from a crap show. The premise is fine, if you had more time to fine tune it would be the kind of story I would really enjoy.
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Thanks for the encouragement, Dude. If an idea hits me, I'll run with it. The broken down vehicle is no issue, but I have no idea how to incorporate a hacksaw with out it feeling shoe-horned in. There are only some many uses for a hacksaw, and when you factor in the sci-fi genre, this round is particularly brutal. As of right now, I'm totally stumped. |
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FrankM |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 12:59pm |
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LocationBetween Chair and Keyboard Posts1447 Posts Per Day 0.62 |
Thanks for the encouragement, Dude. If an idea hits me, I'll run with it. The broken down vehicle is no issue, but I have no idea how to incorporate a hacksaw with out it feeling shoe-horned in. There are only some many uses for a hacksaw, and when you factor in the sci-fi genre, this round is particularly brutal. As of right now, I'm totally stumped. |
If it helps, the criteria is “handsaw” which could be a hacksaw, coping saw, keyhole saw, etc. If the story is set on Tralfamadore, you might be able to sneak by someone saying “my hand saw that.” |
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DustinBowcot |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 1:03pm |
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If it helps, the criteria is “handsaw” which could be a hacksaw, coping saw, keyhole saw, etc.
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Thanks, Frank. I'm pretty sure nobody realised that. |
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Zack |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 1:24pm |
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LocationErlanger, KY Posts4504 Posts Per Day 0.69 |
If it helps, the criteria is “handsaw” which could be a hacksaw, coping saw, keyhole saw, etc. If the story is set on Tralfamadore, you might be able to sneak by someone saying “my hand saw that.” |
Holy shit. I feel dumb. Completely misread that. Should be much easier now that I'm not handicapping myself. Lol Thanks, Frank. |
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Zack |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 3:01pm |
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LocationErlanger, KY Posts4504 Posts Per Day 0.69 |
Couple of questions...
How much of the script needs to take place inside of the broken down vehicle?
And what constitutes as a handsaw? Can it be a small chainsaw? An electric saw? A dismounted floor saw? |
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DustinBowcot |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 3:10pm |
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Couple of questions...
How much of the script needs to take place inside of the broken down vehicle?
And what constitutes as a handsaw? Can it be a small chainsaw? An electric saw? A dismounted floor saw? |
Any type of saw you can use with one hand. |
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Zack |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 3:12pm |
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LocationErlanger, KY Posts4504 Posts Per Day 0.69 |
Quoted from DustinBowcot
Any type of saw you can use with one hand.
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That's what I was thinking. Just wanted to make sure. Lol. |
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FrankM |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 3:25pm |
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LocationBetween Chair and Keyboard Posts1447 Posts Per Day 0.62 |
Quoted from DustinBowcot
Any type of saw you can use with one hand.
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Ash Williams? |
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Zack |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 3:35pm |
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Was literally just thinking that. Lol |
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Posted: June 29th, 2019, 4:26pm |
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It still kinda takes two hands to use it... even if one of them is missing. |
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Zack |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 4:43pm |
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Alright. I've got that spark back. Matt, I blame you for this. |
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Matthew Taylor |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 6:06pm |
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Alright. I've got that spark back. Matt, I blame you for this. |
I look forward to reading what you come up with |
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Gary in Houston |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 7:29pm |
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FADE IN: A space ship hovers over a car broken down on the side of the road. On the side of the car it reads "DAVID COPPERFRAUD, MAGICIAN."
COPPERFRAUD, 103 and incredibly handsome for his age, notices the space ship. WE SEE him thinking. Maybe he's thinking. He could have gas for all we know. But in quick order he pulls out a handsaw from under his majestic cape and starts sawing his car in half.
5 WEEKS LATER --
The space ship long gone, Copperfraud finally finishes sawing the car in half. His assistant, FLOOZIE, 18, built like a stripper, sticks her head out on one end of the car, and her legs out the other end. Copperfraud takes a bow to a non-existent audience.
Despondent that the ship has disappeared, Copperfraud saws his own head off.
Just as his head hits the ground, the space ship reappears. A door opens and a grotesque alien, ZORK, with 385 1/2 tentacles, 3 heads and one eyeball, appears in the opening. Zork sees Copperfraud's head rolling on the ground.
ZORK Sixyslkwexnnklajsldfuiuoialsdkjalsdfuaosdufois lkajsldkjfjj008909808023842093838309ljkjwe0... osoiu32930lnesdj!!!!!
Zork farts and returns to the ship. It immediately disappears. Floozie lights a Lucky Strike cigarette. The cigarette with a smooth taste. The flame from the cig lights Zork's gaseous fart, starting a chain reaction that blows up the entire planet. Ha ha!
FADE OUT, BITCH
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Bounty (TV Pilot) -- Top 1% of discoverable screenplays on Coverfly I'll Be Seeing You (short) - OWC winner The Gambler (short) - OWC winner Skip (short) - filmed Country Road 12 (short) - filmed The Family Man (short) - filmed The Journeyers (feature) - optioned
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Warren |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 7:41pm |
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PKCardinal |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 7:46pm |
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I like that you added mystery to your story, Gary.
I can't stop wondering... what happened to that 386th tentacle? |
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Gary in Houston |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 7:54pm |
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I like that you added mystery to your story, Gary.
I can't stop wondering... what happened to that 386th tentacle? |
It becomes the object in week six of the Challenge: Place: Strip Club Men's Bathroom Object: missing half of Zork's tentacle Genre: John Hughes 80's teen comedy |
| Some of my scripts:
Bounty (TV Pilot) -- Top 1% of discoverable screenplays on Coverfly I'll Be Seeing You (short) - OWC winner The Gambler (short) - OWC winner Skip (short) - filmed Country Road 12 (short) - filmed The Family Man (short) - filmed The Journeyers (feature) - optioned
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PKCardinal |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 8:02pm |
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I would definitely read a short titled: The 386th Tentacle. |
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ReneC |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 9:25pm |
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ReneC |
Posted: June 29th, 2019, 9:27pm |
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I'm done. And I freakin' love it. I'm going away for the next two days, back Monday evening. I'm going to have to submit it tonight just in case, but I hope to have time to polish it a bit and resubmit. |
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Warren |
Posted: June 30th, 2019, 5:32am |
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Bloody hell, got half way through my script and realised it wasn't going to come together the way I planned :/
Now I have a day to think of, write, and submit something else. Felt pretty good the other day, now I'm back to square one. |
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Posted: June 30th, 2019, 5:32am |
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I'm done. And I freakin' love it. |
The wink both confuses and scares me. |
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Posted: June 30th, 2019, 5:47am |
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Things get pretty crazy around here in the fifth week. |
This is so true. I've just submitted. |
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AnthonyCawood |
Posted: June 30th, 2019, 8:40am |
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LC |
Posted: June 30th, 2019, 8:58am |
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PKCardinal |
Posted: June 30th, 2019, 10:12am |
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I'm done. And I freakin' love it. |
GULP. |
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FrankM |
Posted: June 30th, 2019, 10:20am |
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I have an idea. What I may not have is time. |
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Zack |
Posted: June 30th, 2019, 1:31pm |
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Not sure if I'll be able to recover after my 4th round effort, but I'll be damned if I'm not giving this my best shot. Good luck, everyone. |
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LC |
Posted: July 1st, 2019, 12:51am |
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Typical. Finally got a semi-idea, but don't know if I'll have time. |
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Warren |
Posted: July 1st, 2019, 12:52am |
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Typical. Finally got a semi-idea, but don't know if I'll have time. |
I'll be writing tonight as well. |
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Posted: July 1st, 2019, 1:07am |
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Well, good luck, Warren . I think you'll be fine. I hate when I have an idea stuck in my head and it's making no room for a new one. Finally I released it so a new one could creep in. |
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Warren |
Posted: July 1st, 2019, 3:45am |
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LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
Well, good luck, Warren . I think you'll be fine. I hate when I have an idea stuck in my head and it's making no room for a new one. Finally I released it so a new one could creep in. |
Fine is probably the best I can hope for in round 5, but thanks. |
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Posted: July 1st, 2019, 5:45am |
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Done! Submitted! That's my campaign over. Can just relax and hopefully read some good sci-fi. That was an epic adventure.
Thanks Sean and Don for running this. Much fun was had. |
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Posted: July 1st, 2019, 6:26am |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
Dammit, saw a few typos, edited and submitted again. Not looking at it now until it goes up. I'm really done now. |
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Posted: July 1st, 2019, 6:27am |
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Well, now I am panicking lol - I want to get an entry in as I don't like not finishing what I started, I want to see it through.
But, it's amazing how, in your head, an idea can be great, but turns to absolute bullshit as soon as it is written down lol
looks like it's going to be another late night, wine fueled entry |
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Posted: July 1st, 2019, 6:05pm |
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LocationShakespeare's county Posts1770 Posts Per Day 0.87 |
Finally! just written FADE OUT on round 5... holy crap was this tournament a bigger challenge than I had ever expected. This last entry was the most rushed, the most drink fueled, the most uninspired piece of word vomit I have ever produced... but I did it, and I am strangely proud that I have managed to complete the entire challenge. Well done to everyone who has entered, entirely or partially, this challenge. I have learned a lot from you guys, it has (mostly) been super fun, and I wish you all the best of luck with your new scripts - it will make me immensely happy if I see atleast one of these produced. Forgive me if you don't see me around here much after this... I'll be sleeping |
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Posted: July 1st, 2019, 6:29pm |
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Finally! just written FADE OUT on round 5... holy crap was this tournament a bigger challenge than I had ever expected. This last entry was the most rushed, the most drink fueled, the most uninspired piece of word vomit I have ever produced... but I did it, and I am strangely proud that I have managed to complete the entire challenge. Well done to everyone who has entered, entirely or partially, this challenge. I have learned a lot from you guys, it has (mostly) been super fun, and I wish you all the best of luck with your new scripts - it will make me immensely happy if I see atleast one of these produced. Forgive me if you don't see me around here much after this... I'll be sleeping |
Congratulations on finishing, Mathew. It's a marathon for sure. You did a great job, got a couple of excellent scripts out of the deal and earned some bragging rights along the way. Can't wait to see what you came up with this round. |
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PKCardinal |
Posted: July 1st, 2019, 6:31pm |
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For the record, I'm editing my entry as we speak.
It's either a load of garbage, or pretty good. I seriously can't tell which. I can only guarantee it is nothing in between. |
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Posted: July 1st, 2019, 6:33pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
For the record, I'm editing my entry as we speak.
It's either a load of garbage, or pretty good. I seriously can't tell which. I can only guarantee it is nothing in between. |
I'll go with anything between pretty good and amazing for yours. |
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Posted: July 1st, 2019, 7:17pm |
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LocationUK Posts4324 Posts Per Day 1.13 |
1.15 am UK and i've just submitted... phew! Have lost all sense of perspective on wether my last script is rubbish or merely average Have enjoyed the challenge though, the 72 hour window has been brutal but I'm happy I stayed the course. Well done to all! |
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JEStaats |
Posted: July 1st, 2019, 10:39pm |
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LocationTucson, AZ Posts1736 Posts Per Day 0.61 |
Well...it's been five weeks of mediocrity for this cowboy. Riding that flatline between seven and thirteen. I just submitted another meh short for your dissection. Serenity now.
It's amazing how a good story can be just obliterated by the focus of just a line or two of dialog.
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Posted: July 1st, 2019, 10:45pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
It's amazing how a good story can be just obliterated
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This sums up how I felt after your The Belly of the Beast review |
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Posted: July 1st, 2019, 10:53pm |
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Funny, Warren. Don't we all love the candour and anonymity of these challenges. ... I'm not going to make the deadline. Yes, I know, you're all with baited breath at that announcement... After ditching my second idea last night for a third brainstorm this morning there's not enough time to finish. I might finish it later without being hamstrung by the handsaw. Gonna be mighty curious how you all weaved that in. Carry on. Sadly, out here. |
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Posted: July 1st, 2019, 11:00pm |
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Managed to get something in under the wire. Let's see how everyone rips this one apart. |
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Warren |
Posted: July 1st, 2019, 11:01pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
Funny, Warren. Don't we all love the candour and anonymity of these challenges. ... |
Thankfully we don’t need to impress everybody, just the vast majority That review was crushing though haha. Thanks for the sleepless night John
I'm not going to make the deadline. Yes, I know, you're all with baited breath at that announcement... After ditching my second idea last night for a third brainstorm this morning there's not enough time to finish. I might finish it later without being hamstrung by the handsaw.
Gonna be mighty curious how you all weaved that in. Carry on. Sadly, out here. |
Sorry to hear it, I reckon we'll drop to about 10 entries this round, just a feeling. |
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PKCardinal |
Posted: July 1st, 2019, 11:06pm |
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I might finish it later without being hamstrung by the handsaw.
Gonna be mighty curious how you all weaved that in. |
I went with a broken down car made entirely out of handsaws. Oops. I’ve said too much. |
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JEStaats |
Posted: July 1st, 2019, 11:06pm |
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LocationTucson, AZ Posts1736 Posts Per Day 0.61 |
This sums up how I felt after your The Belly of the Beast review |
OMG, I'm laughing so hard at the both of us on this one. I went back and read my review...sorry, mate. I think that's one of the harshest I've ever written! Maybe I was riding that rum-runner highball, who knows. But seriously, I would expect more from you! |
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Warren |
Posted: July 1st, 2019, 11:07pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
I went with a broken down car made entirely out of handsaws.
Oops. I’ve said too much.
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Warren |
Posted: July 1st, 2019, 11:10pm |
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LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
OMG, I'm laughing so hard at the both of us on this one. I went back and read my review...sorry, mate. I think that's one of the harshest I've ever written! Maybe I was riding that rum-runner highball, who knows. But seriously, I would expect more from you!
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All good, I give frank/honest reviews so I have to be able to take them. I did have a moment of questioning whether writing was really for me after that review though |
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Posted: July 1st, 2019, 11:19pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
I would expect more from you!
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Posted: July 1st, 2019, 11:32pm |
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LocationThe Great Southern Land Posts7644 Posts Per Day 1.34 |
Um John, Warren placed third that round with Belly Of The Beast, so I think he's since recovered from your scathing (I just read it) review. Good work keeping him grounded though. |
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JEStaats |
Posted: July 1st, 2019, 11:35pm |
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LocationTucson, AZ Posts1736 Posts Per Day 0.61 |
That narrows it down dramatically since so few did. Mine met with a familiar scalpel. |
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JEStaats |
Posted: July 1st, 2019, 11:36pm |
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LocationTucson, AZ Posts1736 Posts Per Day 0.61 |
Um John, Warren placed third that round with Belly Of The Beast, so I think he's since recovered from your scathing (I just read it) review. Good work keeping him grounded though. |
I know. Funny, but I'm still a wee bit baffled. |
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Warren |
Posted: July 1st, 2019, 11:45pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
Um John, Warren placed third that round with Belly Of The Beast, so I think he's since recovered from your scathing (I just read it) review.
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ReneC |
Posted: July 1st, 2019, 11:56pm |
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LocationVancouver, BC Posts1435 Posts Per Day 0.31 |
I just got home from my Canada Day weekend away, and it's past the deadline. I'm SO glad I pushed to submit something before I left. Even with no chance to revisit it, I had more time to write that than any of the previous rounds, so I'm good with that. Now I have to wait until tomorrow for the bashing to begin. It's been a brutal 5 weeks. So much reading. So many ideas. It's a whirlwind. I'm looking forward to a little down time after this round ends. Congrats to everyone who participated. It's been fun being in the trenches with you all. |
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JEStaats |
Posted: July 2nd, 2019, 12:06am |
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LocationTucson, AZ Posts1736 Posts Per Day 0.61 |
It's been a brutal 5 weeks. So much reading. So many ideas. It's a whirlwind. I'm looking forward to a little down time after this round ends.
Congrats to everyone who participated. It's been fun being in the trenches with you all. |
Agreed, so much fun but I can't wait to get back to writing some comics! |
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Posted: July 2nd, 2019, 12:15am |
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All so caught up in the tournament... Head on down to Frank's Birthday thread and wish him a belated (now, was yesterday) cheers. |
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Posted: July 2nd, 2019, 12:30am |
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I forgot to mention, I did read all the scripts this round but haven't had time to leave reviews for around five or six of them. Sorry if yours is one, if you want me to write the review just message me after the reveal and I'll be happy to. |
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Posted: July 2nd, 2019, 5:36pm |
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I wonder how many entries this time round? |
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ReneC |
Posted: July 2nd, 2019, 5:39pm |
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I wonder how many entries this time round? |
I'm betting 10. |
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Posted: July 2nd, 2019, 5:41pm |
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It’s so quiet here, I’m thinking 5. |
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Posted: July 2nd, 2019, 5:53pm |
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LocationErlanger, KY Posts4504 Posts Per Day 0.69 |
I'm in the same boat as Rene. I've read a lot more than I've been able to actually review. Will try to get a couple more review up for the round 4 scripts. If you want my opinion on your script, just hit me up after the reveal. |
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It’s so quiet here, I’m thinking 5.
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Posted: July 2nd, 2019, 6:11pm |
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We're chomping at the bit to see the final round of scripts, but we're being good little patient SSers so the amazing and fantastic Don doesn't feel pressured.
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Round 1 -- 20 participants Round 2 -- 21 Round 3 -- 18 Round 4 -- 15 Round 5 -- ??
We're losing 3 a round for the last three rounds so I'll say we'll be at 12. |
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FrankM |
Posted: July 2nd, 2019, 6:13pm |
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LocationBetween Chair and Keyboard Posts1447 Posts Per Day 0.62 |
Though I had time to think about my story, I literally had three hours to type it up.
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Posted: July 2nd, 2019, 6:14pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
I guessed 10 on the other thread, I'm sticking with that. |
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LocationBetween Chair and Keyboard Posts1447 Posts Per Day 0.62 |
Round 1 -- 20 participants Round 2 -- 21 Round 3 -- 18 Round 4 -- 15 Round 5 -- ??
We're losing 3 a round for the last three rounds so I'll say we'll be at 12. |
Linear extrapolation of chaotic processes for the win |
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LocationErlanger, KY Posts4504 Posts Per Day 0.69 |
Though I had time to think about my story, I literally had three hours to type it up.
Do plan to fix up all five entries incorporating the feedback I received. |
I'm trying as hard as I can to forget my round 4 abomination. It haunts me. The others, I actually plan to go back to. |
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Posted: July 2nd, 2019, 6:18pm |
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Linear extrapolation of chaotic processes for the win |
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Linear extrapolation of chaotic processes for the win |
I'll counter your "linear extrapolation of chaotic processes" card with my: "Post hoc ergo propter hoc" card. It rained last week at my house and 5 participants dropped out. It rained again this week, therefore 5 more will drop out. Warren is correct. It'll be 10. |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
I'm excited to see the last set of scripts... it's genuinely been a challenge but I've enjoyed it |
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I really want to see who wrote what for round 4. Some really solid scripts considering the criteria, and I have no idea who they belong to.
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There's no "redeeming" Warren. He may have to go find "sanctuary" with Paul.
That's all I got. And I stole one of them from the previous post. |
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I'm guessing you've been 'redeemed' this last round? |
There's no "redeeming" Warren. He may have to go find "sanctuary" with Paul.
That's all I got. And I stole one of them from the previous post. |
Very good, all round, but I have no idea what you’re talking about |
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