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I was also thinking of letting MikeP select the one that he most-wants looked at from his his own library.
Swell. Later this week I'm also teaching a class on opening mouth and inserting foot over at tha annex. Let me troll through my house of horrors and see what I can inflict on you all.
:p
13 feature scripts, 2 short subjects. One sale, 4 options. Nothing filmed. Damn.
Currently rewriting another writer's SciFi script for an indie producer in L.A.
I'll happily join in. I promise to bite my tongue if I see any "unfilmmables" : )
One thing I would say though is that perhaps it would help if there was something of a focus to the discussion.
For instance, Cindys Halloween Games was mentioned as a possible candidate.
Having read and commented on an earleir version I know that she is not intending to create a horror or supernatural thriller as such but if one wasn't aware of that a lot of the discussion could centre around how to make it scarier or more thrilling etc
In other words the discussion could easily slide into territory that the author has no interest in pursuing so will be of little use.
Just feel like we need some kind of direction with it. Anybody else understand what I'm talking about?
I would like to see serious discussions about things like transitions, subplots, throughlines and things like that. Those are things I want to get better at understanding myself. I want every scene picked apart.
And decadence, I know what you mean. We should also make sure the author actually wants to see their script disected.
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
This one went quickly, but for what it's worth, I would like to be in as well. I've had my moments of writing clever and insightful reviews. I haven't read any of the suggestions before so I could offer a fresh perspective on at least those. Even if we pick one I have read, I can go into anything fresh.
...perhaps it would help if there was something of a focus to the discussion.
You may be right, but at the same time, it would be kind of an artificial direction. I was kind of thinking the author should see what kind of thoughts arise organically from the participants. If the author directs the flow of conversation, some really good ideas might never even arise. Does that make sense?
And the author will choose to accept or deny whatever pieces of feedback they get anyway.
Anyways, we will just have to see how it goes. These conversations sometimes take on a life their own and spin off in unpredictable ways -- as did the "rules" thread that spawned this idea in the first place.
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Gabe, George, Sham, and whoever -- this is completely open. My "seven member" cut-off was completely arbitrary. As long as they have read the script, anyone and everyone is encouraged to participate.
This is just an experiment to see if we can turn the discussion back towards feature script once in a while. At least a little.
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As for the script itself -- are there any other recommendations aside from MikeP? Feel free to toss something into the hat if you actually intend to participate, as everybody should be happy with the choice.
I have dropped MikeP a note asking him to select one of his scripts, and if nobody else pipes up, then Mike it shall be.
I'm fine with it being MikeP's script. But I think we should start a thread where authors, if they want this type of treatment on their script, can deposit the name of that script. Then the next script can be picked randomly from that thread.
Would be good if you pick a script before the weekend... well, it would be good for me at least.
And again, unless I totally misunderstood the point of this. We're not writing reviews for the script. We can of course, but those should go in the script's thread not here. This here is supposed to be discussions about the script.
I'm out for the reasons that everybody knows like: I'm a bad English writer; I'm a bad reviewer because I'm a bad English writer, I'm not a feature writer, so won't to be a good reviewer of features. I'm a shortscriptwriter...
Would be good if you pick a script before the weekend
I've got Mike's, and I'll put it out there this evening if there is no competition -- right now, it appears that most are in agreement. Mike seems to know what he is doing -- so it probably won't suck -- and he also told me, "...this one breaks alot of rules.."
Haha...it sounds like a perfect fit for our little experiment.
Isn't the nature of a review a discussion about the script? It's true that some reviews can get bloated, so is there a recommendation on how we should discuss it? I think starting with a review of some kind would be useful in any case. We're in a text-based medium without time limits, so it's not as if we're taking up anyone's time.
EDIT: Are you depositing the script on a new thread then?
Isn't the nature of a review a discussion about the script? It's true that some reviews can get bloated, so is there a recommendation on how we should discuss it? I think starting with a review of some kind would be useful in any case. We're in a text-based medium without time limits, so it's not as if we're taking up anyone's time.
EDIT: Are you depositing the script on a new thread then?
This is not supposed to be a collection of reviews. It is just readers talking about different aspects of the story or characters.
But we will just have to see how it evolves, you know?
And yes -- the discussion (NOT the script) will be getting it's own thread. Probably on your Screenwriting board, George.