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Cartmanator
Posted: August 15th, 2005, 2:01am Report to Moderator
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Okay so this is where I say whats been said ......alot.

"I have what I think to be an idea good enough to develope and require someone of equal or better talent to assist."

I have 2 concepts I am trying to push now and I would like to get atleast some drafts that I am hoping to pitch to some.........people.

you want SPECIFICS! of course.
well one is a Freddy Vs Jason/Jeepers Creepers type of Film.
With the usual crappy teens being total dweebs and everyone waits in anticpation as theyre horribly ended one by one.

the other of course is a teen comedy similar to road trip.
with again usual crappy teens being total dweebs and everyone waits in anticipation for them to have a horrible experince with someone gross.

If you feel you are a qualifed creative geniuse that can make a decent draft please post here.

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dogglebe
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Sorry, I'm only qualified for original stories with characters that interest the readers/viewers.  Lifeless plots and characters that have been beaten to death just aren't my strong suit.


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Quoted from Cartmanator

With the usual crappy teens being total dweebs and everyone waits in anticpation as theyre horribly ended one by one.


Man, you need to work on this pitch. Are you deliberately trying to make it sound awful?

Are your ideas any further developed than this? If not, they are not ideas they are cliches. I don't think any writers on here need you to supply them with this great 'original' premise. If I needed ideas like this, a quick look in the big book of movie cliches would suffice.

It's like saying "Hey guys, I've got this great idea, it's about this boy who.... meets a girl and they like... fall in love. Is anyone talented enough to make this work?"
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dogglebe
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Another thing, Cartman:  No one really has any success here when their first post is, "Who wants to co-write a script with me?"  Or, in your case, "Who wants to write a script based on my bad idea?"

If you have any scripts, please post them.  But don't tell us you want us to write your scripts so you can show them to some....people.


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I'll chime in too:

No one in the industry is looking for these type of scripts at the moment - you're wasting time.

Get some feelers out and you'll find out what readers are looking for. These movies have been done to death, so they are not in demand.

Good luck!


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Have you seen some of the films these days? I think they are looking for exactly what he's selling but you are right and sadly I think someone would buy the idea.


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Cartmanator
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Thanks Wes. You got exactly what I was implying.
As for the rest of you I can commend you on taking your writing so seriously then to become part of a cliche.

I myself think hollywood itself is a cliche. Some will agree, Some will beg to differ.

But if there is anyone interested in a Slasher or Road Trip comedy collaberation speak now or forever hold your peace. Because saying nothing will suffice.
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MacDuff
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Wes - true...but remember these movies were started 1/2 years ago...the industry is ever changing.

Now - I'm not saying these scripts would not be optioned, but chances are slimmer compared to something new and innovative.


From what I've been told, expect a rush of creature features and life comedies...


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Good point mac. It might be ever changing I would think a better term would be ever rotating. Cause if it was ever changing we wouldnt see the same cliche's spit out over and over and over and over again.
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Very true Cartmanator.

Good luck with your project, hopefully it falls into kind hands!


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Quoted from Cartmanator
But if there is anyone interested in a Slasher or Road Trip comedy collaberation speak now or forever hold your peace. Because saying nothing will suffice.


Just trying to help...it's just not the help that you (or the others like you) wanted.


Phil

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Banana Chan. Banana Chan. Banana Chan. Banana Chan. Banana Chan. Banana Chan. Banana Chan. Banana Chan. Banana Chan. Banana Chan. Banana Chan. Banana Chan. Banana Chan. Banana Chan.

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Have you ever thought of doing a stand-up act or a one man show called Banana Chan & Me?

Does your favorite song have the words "My Shhhh is bananas, B-A-N-A-N-A-S" in it...?


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So to be the designated driver of this thread. Anyone at all interested in either project?
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Cartman you need to work on that script a lot. It sounds like a pitch for Seasme street does Friday the 13th





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I agree with Kingpin. You will have more luck finding writing assistance if come in with an original twist on the old concepts than simply rehashing the old concepts. Try to give the crappy teens a fresh angle, or better yet, make them crappy adults...or even better, intelligent adults who get wrapped up in this situation that forces these controlled business people of power and control into a state of no control at all. Imagine if you will...a slasher that stars people like Donald Trump and see how they react...that's an original twist...or at least not overdone.


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If I may add my thoughts...

I don't think that the cliche is necessarily bad; there are good slasher movies, and these can be very popular and successful. The problem is that your description is "slasher" and nothing else; you are not asking for a partner in a specific movie so much as a genre. Develop more of the movie, even within the same area, and you will have yourself not just a general category but the outline for the movie itself. And then people will know exactly your intent and will be able to help.
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You should combine your two pitches, like a roadtrip slasher teen comedy, try that out, that may be a little more interesting then just a slasher or a teen road trip film, you know.
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I figure I'll join in...

Personally I couldn't write either one if I tried.  I could give a shot at writing a flatout disgusting comedy that would make your stomach cringe, but I don't think it would be too good.  Basically, a slasher film about stupid teens and a teen comedy about stupid teens bores me now.  Too many times have we seen this.  It's gotta be unique, man.

But it's your work, do as you please


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