Oh, ok Jeff.

These things in mine - I saw them later,  thought you were referring to something else (like word usage etc, wordiness etc). These are far bearable in my humble opinion. But thanks for expanding on what you said earlier.
Like 'hands akimbo" - I knew it but only a day later. Good way to remember forever.

I like these challenges for this - two hours, bring it... -if you're ready to expose raw writing then great.
I don't think that  two days writing going to look much better by the way, so not expecting anything much (writing wise).  

What's interesting - I was reading Ray's and noticed the absence of the articles and noted to myself that I must try it sometimes. I've seen it before and always liked it. Reads cleaner.
Other stuff - yes, but not "oh,oh,oh poor" (in both mine and his). It's just "not very good" and needs editing.

Anyway, thanks -I asked for it and I got it. Yeah, you don't need to go any further - that would inspire us to stop doing this altogether

Quoted from khamanna What's interesting - I was reading Ray's and noticed the absence of the articles and noted to myself that I must try it sometimes. I've seen it before and always liked it. Reads cleaner. Yeah, you don't need to go any further - that would inspire us to stop doing this altogether

Whut...?
What articles were absent? (look of a dullard, here)

... and...

BITE YOUR TONGUE!
We shall never drop this, petty criticisms of our two-hour babies be darned!
GRRRRR!!!!

K and Ray - great job both of you.  

Ray when do you and Ryan want to do your showdown?

We're cooking up the preliminaries now.
Looks like this evening.
PM comin' in a couple minutes.

Remember that I will be choosing the logline randomly.  

Well semi-randomly because it needs to be something you could write in a few pages and within a couple of days.

Locking this thread now and moving back to the sticky thread.

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