I thought this was a great story, well-done and easy to read.... right until the end. I thought it would be a better feature-length piece to see the hero arc.
I got the impression you were going somewhere but then you surprised me and didn't. I mean, I'm all for surprises, but his lack of arc bothered me and I really felt like you could have gone to some great, deep places with his character.
(This is my first post--I hope this is the acceptable way to post feedback.) |