I didn't notice that this had been revised until today.

I like this version a lot more, you addressed all the issues nicely. Everything that wasn't clear before is now taken care of, and the new ending works better IMO. So, well done.

Anyone who hasn't read the new version should take a look at this, it's different enough to be worth the effort.

I've never seen Don post a review before... Strange days, indeed. Anyways, I'll try to get around to this one as soon as I can. I've got it saved to my desk top.

Just finished up this script and liked it a lot.  It turned out totally different than I expected and even had the horror touch on it.  I even like the little twist, even though it became pretty appart about half way through, on the end and it added much more depth to Dom's character.

Good script.  You should be proud of it.

T.I.N.

Pete and T.I.N,

Thanks for the feedback.  I received a lot of good suggestions from everyone regarding the first version that I tried to put into this second draft, and I was pretty happy with the end result, even if it is different.

Balt,

Hope you enjoy it when you get around to it.


Mike