Hey Jordan I just finished to read your "infested" script - hehe!

As someone here said it was well written, - action and dialogues - the drunkers' were my favorites lines.

But I have to say that it seemed to be a unfineshed story. How and why? I think after the last scene when we know the sky is infested by millions of flyes you have to cut to a hero in another city that wasn't contamineted yet by the flyes and the hero will fight to exterminate them and we will keep one's finger crossed for him to succeed. Now I think you will have a good story!

By the way, I was dinnering when I read this disgusted script, Huuuugoooo!!

PS Just one sugestion: how about a hero with a sindrome of fear like Indiana Jones with snakes? The hero has fear of maggots.

thanks for the read Helio

Yeah, this isn't the best script to read while you are dinnering, I hope you weren't eating rice

and on the ending, the whole world is infested, nobody lives, at least that's what I tried to imply, I was gonna have like the 2 drunks still alive sitting at the bar, but I felt that didn't work.

thanks again for the read

Toilet humour didn't work for me.  I don't have anything to say about the rest, really.  It was entertaining as a script.  I wouldn't make it through as a film unless the direction and makeup were really good.    

Glad that you had correct format, grammar, spelling, etc.  You picked something and went with it, and it looks like you entertained a lot of people.  Good work!

Thanks for the read, Glad you like most of it.  I know the toilet scene is sick, but to be honest it is probably my favorite scene because I have never written anything so gross and disgusting before

anyways. thanks again

This was disgusting, repulsive, and offensive...so I loved it. I thought it was really funny and disgusting. there's not much of an overall story or main characters, just different cases of the maggots coming out, so there should be both an explanation and a/some main characters trying to fight it. So, it can be expounded upon if you choose to, though I doubt you will.

Yeah, but very entertaining for seven pages and it moved very quickly. the fat guy with the hershey squirts, the faggots/maggots remark, and little billy's foul mouth and story all very funny stuff. I could tell you had a lot of fun writing this.

Thanks for the Bump Steven, glad you liked this one.

I gotta kick out of writing this, it was a lot of fun to See how far out there and how gross I could go.

This may also be animated some time.  My friend is going into animation and he thought it would be fun to do this one. So if it ever happens I'll be sue to post it if it isn't to disgusting...LOL

Thanks again, and Mittens is next on my list

Nice short. Disgusting and kinda disturbing. But I was weirded out more by Spoiled. That was just out of the freaking ball park disturbing.

I had a blast reading this. Sure looks like the kinda script that was really funny to write as well. Good work.


Cheers, Chismeister.

Thanks for the read Chisem, glad you found it disgusting, maybe I should have some incest maggot scenes, get the best of both worlds....LOL

Thanks again for the read.

Hey Jordan

I know this has been up a while but I thought I'd give it a read and review.

I found that you introduced Mrs Wilkerson well but skimmed over Little Bill and his parents.  The Fat man scene was pretty disgusting but I don't know if I'd use words like 'fart', 'tighty whities' and 'trumpets out..'.  These are very funny descriptions but I don't think serious enough for scripts (shame though cos I laughed at them).

A lot of people might say they want to know why this is happening and what happened next but for me I liked it as it is, short and sweet...in revolting way.  Nice.

Not sure about the drunks dialogue 'we gotta find a different place'.

Overall an enjoyable and quick read.  Loved the end image.

Good stuff.

Thanks for the read Alffy, glad you liked it.

I tried to write this more comical that serious cause the subject matter is, well, it is what it is...LOL

Thanks again for the read

Quoted from The boy who could fly Thanks for the read Chisem, glad you found it disgusting, maybe I should have some incest maggot scenes, get the best of both worlds....LOL Thanks again for the read.

Oh Jesus Christ. You absolutely have to do that. Do you have any idea how freaking awesome incestuous maggots would be? I'd pay to see that.


Cheers, Chismeister.

that would probably be the most disgusting thing ever, so yeah, if anyone should, it should be me

That first scene was so cool, man. If filmed that could be so visually nasty and fun for the viewers.

And the second scene with the Fat Man, no matter how childish that was I actually could not stop laughing. All the unnecessary detail had me cracking up. “Accompanied by two farts, one high pitch, the other a low grumble.” – HA!

On page five till has something to do with like gardening. Until is the word you’re looking for.

Little Bill and Big Bill family was pretty funny. The whole kicked in the nuts thing was amusing.

I can imagine you having a blast writing this. It was a nasty, gross, disgusting, foul story, that I really liked so good job.

Good Luck!

Gory, over the top, and extremly funny! This is a very entertaining script. A little bit on the gross side, but that's fine with me! I loved the scene with Little Billy and his parents. It was hilarious!!! Good job and keep up the good work. 8 out of 10

Thanks for the reads Tyler and Zack, glad you liked this sick little tale.  I hope it made your stomach turn just a little bit

Thanks again.