I never bought into the idea that fish only had few seconds worth of memory.  Then how can schools of fish travel across the oceans with that disability?

Clever little script.  You ended it just before it got too repetitious.

Thanks for the read Richcraft - and yes, I think it's a myth for sure. As I said earlier, the idea came to me while watching a program on human amnesia.

Anthony

Been thinking on it and made a few changes since you read it. Eric is now Bobby and the story is gaining depth. Still a way until I am genuinely satisfied with it.

Likely to post it on here within the next month, but am bogged down with life and a short film I'm part of, which is an amazing vehicle for learning. Actually getting your hands dirty with cameras, differing takes and shots, lighting, actors, continuity, make up, sound and even slating will immeasurably improve and give depth to your writing.

Hopefully the experience of being on set will get my lazy arse moving. Not sure if you've heard of it, but am starting to work on a script for next year's Tropfest, which is "the world's largest short film festival" and hopefully I can get something shot and produced for it by October. Obviously to be screened it will be very competitive, but try I must. Check out the site and if you think you have something from a writing perspective, then let me know, 'cos my goal is to get something produced and shot for the festival, whether I write it or not.

Andrew

I like your story better than Finding Nemo.

The dialogue, I think it gets to be a bit heavy. But I still think is good.

The comment on the audience threw me off for two reasons: First, it made me remember that was actually reading instead of allowing me to envision the story. Second, I think it goes against character.

Take care,

Teo

Teo,

Thanks for the read and I'm glad you enjoyed it - Anthony

Yup - funny, annoying, but still funny. Has to be killed off before it gets too annoying, and I think that got that about right.
Simon

Thanks for the read SiColl - and yes, comically annoying was what I was going for.

Just talked to a friend of mine who said her son loaded some program that can animate the fishes. I told her she may beat everyone other pretender to the punch as far as filming one of my scripts.